"Why did you choose University of Central Florida?" This is a question that is asked to me almost as often as "What do you want to be in the future?"
Hmmm, I dont know if you want to start out like that. The topic sentence isn't eye-catching...
In addition to the liveliness of the campus, t
--> You should try to make this part flow more from the previous sentence...
I feel like you are listing instead of really describing.
After realizing that UCF was the college that I wanted to be at
--> How about...After realizing that UCF was the college that I wanted to attend...
As I read through these statements, I noticed a relationship between the students and the professors that not many colleges possess.
--> How so? I mean just by reading the statements? So have you read statements from all the other colleges you know or exist?
my the college.
--> I'm pretty sure you meant BY the college. but just in case haha
and other organization
--> and other organizations..
Having participated in sports and other organization for most of my life, extracurricular activities has definitely become one of my key things to look for in a collegeperiod.
and UCF definitely has what I am looking for.
--> When you conclude you should never write "In conclusion" "To sum it all up" "All in all"
liveliness, location, academics, and activities are among the many reason why I have chosen to apply at the University of Central Florida.
--> Those are common answers that anyone can say about any college. Maybe you should pick something specific or another unique quality the university has that no other college has. I mean you've been on the campus itself, and it seems like you know a lot about it. So why not put some more detail and personal aspects into this?