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'Chris McCandless, an unsettling character' - UVA supplement essay



jleep23 1 / 1  
Dec 30, 2011   #1
College of Arts and Sciences: What work of art, music, science, mathematics, or literature has surprised, unsettled, or challenged you, and in what way?

One of the most unsettling characters I've come across is Chris McCandless from the novel Into the Wild by Jon Krakauer. This young man was a captivating intellectual that had the courage and dedication to make a difference in society. Although I disagreed with most of his decisions, I found his adventurous spirit unique and admirable. He had dreams of living off the land, being an individual, and leaving a minimal carbon footprint, all of which came true with his relentless fortitude. I envy the courage that drove him to turn his dreams into reality, which is truly one of the greatest joys in life.

Early in the novel, McCandless makes a bold statement that reads, "You're wrong if you think that the joy of life comes principally from human relationships." Although I disagree with this statement, I found the originality of it intriguing. Being an extrovert myself, some of the greatest moments in life are with family and friends. Unfortunately, McCandless got caught up in proving to himself, his family, and his friends that he was perfectly happy without them.

It is quite unsettling when McCandless finally comes to the realization, while on the brink of death, that, "Happiness is only real when shared." I wish he could've had the fairytale ending where the hunters show up just in time to revive McCandless and his family welcomes him with open arms. Reality is, Chris died, alone, wishing and praying that all of those people he had left behind were there. It leaves me with an uneasy feeling to know that just before his death he realized that pure happiness comes from being with others.

--- please tell me what you think. be harsh!

dychung7 7 / 19  
Dec 30, 2011   #2
I have never read Into the Wild so I have nothing to say about the novel's content.

You offer a lot about the novel itself, providing context for the readers but I feel like you spend too much time writing about Chris McCandless, instead of yourself. Focus more on HOW this novel has affected YOU. Admissions officers want to see what kind of person you are through these essays.

Good luck on your applications.
I'm also applying to UVA too. :D
daniel44992 13 / 29  
Dec 30, 2011   #3
Okay, I'll start with the good. The last paragraph is the strongest but honestly the rest is kind of weak. It was very... blah. If you could do less "telling" and more "showing." Describe a specific scene from the book or just add some kind of detail. I can see how how this essay could be really good, just less telling.

Sorry to be harsh,its really not horrible, just trying to help. I'm in the same boat with UVa so I know you don't have a ton of time.
karissa_a16 4 / 94  
Dec 30, 2011   #4
I agree with the above poster. It's kind of like a synopsis of the book. Maybe if you talk about how it strengthened your extroverted personality? Please read my common app one. Thanks!
sarahbee 1 / 49  
Dec 30, 2011   #5
i agree with all of the posters. more of a synopsis than essay. expand more on yourself.

if you have a chance please read my princeton essay.


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