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Prompt: We want to get to know you better. What are three words that your best friend would use to describe you and why? 250 words maximum
Genuine, helpful, and innovative. These are the three words that my best friend would use to describe my personality. Genuine - I do believe that it's not necessary for other people to see me in a different identity than who I am. I won't claim different beliefs and thoughts just to please anyone. In a world full of fads, fashion, and personal brands where everyone wants what they don't have, nobody's content to be who they really are. I do not operate under false pretenses, nor am I two-faced; even if it comes to describing my shortcomings. Helpful - being described as a nerd and geeky doesn't prevent me from assisting others. As a sophomore, I tutored many students and helped them during their participation in many robotics contests as well as sharing my previous experience with them. Beside my academic studies, I am also willing to help the others in my social daily life. I remember participating in "Wesal" team, which is a community service team in my school. Last winter, we went to distribute blankets for the homeless people at Christmas. I can say confidently that drawing few smiles on people's faces is a great feeling. Innovative - creating new ideas from solving a math problem with a different approach to creating a new melody in a piece of music specialize my personality between the others. Creativity in my academics, as well as my talent, is evident in the way that I live my life. These are my best core values.
Prompt: We want to get to know you better. What are three words that your best friend would use to describe you and why? 250 words maximum
Genuine, helpful, and innovative
Genuine, helpful, and innovative. These are the three words that my best friend would use to describe my personality. Genuine - I do believe that it's not necessary for other people to see me in a different identity than who I am. I won't claim different beliefs and thoughts just to please anyone. In a world full of fads, fashion, and personal brands where everyone wants what they don't have, nobody's content to be who they really are. I do not operate under false pretenses, nor am I two-faced; even if it comes to describing my shortcomings. Helpful - being described as a nerd and geeky doesn't prevent me from assisting others. As a sophomore, I tutored many students and helped them during their participation in many robotics contests as well as sharing my previous experience with them. Beside my academic studies, I am also willing to help the others in my social daily life. I remember participating in "Wesal" team, which is a community service team in my school. Last winter, we went to distribute blankets for the homeless people at Christmas. I can say confidently that drawing few smiles on people's faces is a great feeling. Innovative - creating new ideas from solving a math problem with a different approach to creating a new melody in a piece of music specialize my personality between the others. Creativity in my academics, as well as my talent, is evident in the way that I live my life. These are my best core values.