please tell me if i need to make any changes. i'm leaving out the name of the college since i'm using it for more than one college.
I am applying to _____________________, because I am aware that it possesses a long history and a reputation for high-caliber, rigorous teaching and learning. What especially attracts me is that the research conducted at the college is geared towards improving the lives of people. I have also come to admire the program because of its well-rounded curriculum and its stellar facilities. The undergraduates at this school who apply to medical school have high chances of being accepted. Keeping this in mind, I am certain that _________________ will prepare me exceptionally well and help me to become a strong candidate for medical school. I appreciate the opportunity to be considered for your school. I look forward to your admission decision. Thank you for your time and attention.
I am applying to _____________________, because I am aware that it possesses a long history and a reputation for high-caliber, rigorous teaching and learning. What especially attracts me is that the research conducted at the college is geared towards improving the lives of people. I have also come to admire the program because of its well-rounded curriculum and its stellar facilities. The undergraduates at this school who apply to medical school have high chances of being accepted. Keeping this in mind, I am certain that _________________ will prepare me exceptionally well and help me to become a strong candidate for medical school. I appreciate the opportunity to be considered for your school. I look forward to your admission decision. Thank you for your time and attention.