Prompt: If your name were an acronym, what would it stand for and how would it reflect your strengths and abilities.
I am Pun Yik Sai on the dotted line. I am Pansy at school simply because it sounds just the same as my Chinese name in Mandarin. But only people close to me know, Cindy is the name engraved in me: it has chosen me on my first English lesson. And when my family call me Cindy, I can always sense something different behind.
The C stands for 'commitment'.
My father is a self-employed mechanical engineer. I never knew how to cope with my playmates' jealousy when I told them about my father's occupation, as the stable, decent pay and high socioeconomic status were largely imagination. Mum told me dad was the top notch in the field he specialized in-I had no doubt on that, but could not help wondering why I constantly receive warning about delayed school fee payment, why I never got pocket money like everybody else. When I get older, the answer eventually loomed on the Economics lesson. My father's assiduous designing is but a section of the entire procedure, a factor of production, so are the fine raw material and tools, so are the two loyal workers. They are the premium ingredients lying still without a cook to turn them into superb delicacy; the exquisite stage props idling without a magician to turn them into standing ovation. And the magician, the quintessence, the soul, is called entrepreneurship.
My commitment to realize the dream my father dreamed, had driven me to embark on the two most challenging electives-Economics and Business, Accounting and Financial Studies and rank the first in form on them at most time, and to run a booth in Mong Kok Flower Market-the greatest event Chinese New Year in Hong Kong with several classmates and alumni. Although there was only around HKD20,000 profit in the end, it was a cheerful and encouraging start of my business career.
And now it leads me to Lehigh.
Thanks in advance :)
I think that you are only talking about your father's dream, but how is it related to your own dream? How does your realization of your father's dream show your commitment?
I think you need to talk more about you in this essay. This seems more about your father than about you. Maybe devote less words to your father and more to you??
My friend is applying to Lehigh, and my advice is going to be from what I saw in her essay.
From my understanding, you're suppose to lend each letter of your name: C I N D Y, an attribute which rings true to who you are. So if C is for commitment, describe how you are committed. Maybe I is for idiosyncratic (that's a mouth full). What's N, D and Y? Take each letter, glue a characteristic or passion of yours to it...That is my understanding of this prompt.
For example:
D- From chemistry to geography class to entering a business competition to dancing at school talent shows- I am Dynamic, able to take on different roles and execute them to the best of my abilities.
This is just an example. I used my characteristic to explain what the letter D means. Get it?
Good luck my friend!
I could be wrong, but I was under the impression (having just read the prompt) that each letter was to be evaluated. What I mean is C is for commitment, I is for x, N is for x, D is for x, and Y is for x. I don't think you'd necessarily have to change your entire essay to fulfill this. You could have your main focus be on the C, as that is your initial, and then have back up adjectives (or whatever) as the I N D and Y. They could possibly relate to commitment. That might be a unique approach. I agree also that the focus should be on YOU, but relating your father's dream to you can be done.
