Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (150 words or fewer, 1000 character maximum).
They came from all over the world, but they all had one thing in common-they were little fishes in a big pond of students. Student-to-Student was a haven for the lost. We formed a family that was united by the an understanding. We understood that it was easy to feel insignificant in such a populated school, so we all wanted to stick together and help each other through our individual journeys, share our dynamic cultures, and personalities. It allowed us to wander to fascinating cultures booming from our concrete school, that I once found to be so contained. Though the English was broken and my Chinese and Spanish were never perfect, the overplayed hand gestures and friendly smiles and laughs got us by. Whether it was reading the words one by one about cellular respiration, editing their grammar in their creative essay, or simply carrying a conversation with them, I found joy in helping them transition into their new waters and give them the basics on how to swim to success-to make it easier to communicate with their teacher, meet new friends, and find a niche of their own.
191 words, need to cut it down to 150. Thanks, any help on grammar & input would be appreciated!
Interesting topic! I don't think you need this sentence:
It allowed us to wander to fascinating cultures booming from our concrete school, that I once found to be so contained.
You could cut this down too: Whether it was reading the words
about cellular repiration slowly . Just find little ways, some unnecessary adjectives and you'd be fine!
