Here is my common app short essay about my first job. Right now, it's at about 168 words. I would truly appreciate any feedback. (:
In the space provided below, please elaborate on one of your activities (extracurricular, personal activities, or work experience)(150 words or fewer).
It was mid-July, the sun was scorching and "SPF" was the talk of the day. It was one of the hottest days of the summer and I was indoors wishing my light blouse was a wool coat. If I had to change something about my first job, it would be the thermostat. As an intern in Human Resources at Goodwill of Silicon Valley my tasks included screening job applicants, organizing pay checks, making copies, as well as greeting guests or receiving telephone calls when I served as the front desk receptionist. Through my work with Goodwill I was exposed with what goes on behind the scenes in an industry. While constant work kept me somewhat warm in that glacier of an office building, I enjoyed the effort I put into my job. For the first time in my life, I experienced working for myself. Thus the feeling of accomplishment this lent me at the end of the day combined with stepping out of the office was pure bliss.
In the space provided below, please elaborate on one of your activities (extracurricular, personal activities, or work experience)(150 words or fewer).
It was mid-July, the sun was scorching and "SPF" was the talk of the day. It was one of the hottest days of the summer and I was indoors wishing my light blouse was a wool coat. If I had to change something about my first job, it would be the thermostat. As an intern in Human Resources at Goodwill of Silicon Valley my tasks included screening job applicants, organizing pay checks, making copies, as well as greeting guests or receiving telephone calls when I served as the front desk receptionist. Through my work with Goodwill I was exposed with what goes on behind the scenes in an industry. While constant work kept me somewhat warm in that glacier of an office building, I enjoyed the effort I put into my job. For the first time in my life, I experienced working for myself. Thus the feeling of accomplishment this lent me at the end of the day combined with stepping out of the office was pure bliss.