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My internship at PSEG this summer was an important experience because it helped me to get an understanding for life outside of high school. Each day, I woke up at 6:30 a.m., dressed up in a shirt and tie, and boarded the express train to Newark, NJ. On the train were men and women whose indifference towards me starkly contrasted the parental figures that surrounded me for the past seventeen years. They drank coffee while furiously typing into their laptops, never looking up to acknowledge me the strange sight of a teenager taking the train to work. Oddly, their indifference made me feel like I was one of them, an adult going to work, not a child needing to be watched over or cared for. Being ignored meant that I was mature enough to figure things out on my own. Moreover, their faith in me developed my own sense of self-reliance. Proudly, I had no major slip-ups. Each day I came home exhausted yet satisfied knowing that I was mature and capable of taking care of myself.
My internship at PSEG this summer was an important experience because it helped me to get an understanding for life outside of high school. Each day, I woke up at 6:30 a.m., dressed up in a shirt and tie, and boarded the express train to Newark, NJ. On the train were men and women whose indifference towards me starkly contrasted the parental figures that surrounded me for the past seventeen years. They drank coffee while furiously typing into their laptops, never looking up to acknowledge me the strange sight of a teenager taking the train to work. Oddly, their indifference made me feel like I was one of them, an adult going to work, not a child needing to be watched over or cared for. Being ignored meant that I was mature enough to figure things out on my own. Moreover, their faith in me developed my own sense of self-reliance. Proudly, I had no major slip-ups. Each day I came home exhausted yet satisfied knowing that I was mature and capable of taking care of myself.
