I need to know if I answered the prompt and if there is any grammatical mistakes. Also, is it good or bad.
What in particular about Yale has influenced your decision to apply? Please limit your response to the space provided.
Many Yalies have a community orientated outlook because of the Residential College system. This would not only allow me to create bonds that would last a life time but also to have the exchange of ideas and to share work with my fellow classmates. If I were a Yalie, I would strengthen my dreams through the endless educational opportunities, and through the rugged individualism of others in the Yale community, so that I may continue my pursuit of eternal experiences to become a better person.
What in particular about Yale has influenced your decision to apply? Please limit your response to the space provided.
Many Yalies have a community orientated outlook because of the Residential College system. This would not only allow me to create bonds that would last a life time but also to have the exchange of ideas and to share work with my fellow classmates. If I were a Yalie, I would strengthen my dreams through the endless educational opportunities, and through the rugged individualism of others in the Yale community, so that I may continue my pursuit of eternal experiences to become a better person.