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Cornell ILR Supplement (San Fernando's Annual March for Justice)



Flower Child 2 / 3  
Jan 1, 2009   #1
Describe your intellectual interests, their evolution, and what makes them exiting to you. In your essay please address how the ILR curriculum will help you fufill these interests and your long term goals.

* ok, so the prompt has to be max. 500 words, and I am at the 627 mark. And I still haven't added my concluding statement. So if you have any suggestions on what to cut out because it is useless or something that seems dull, please let me know!!!!!!!!! THANKS ahead of time!

Streets closed, young and old rallied up, red t-shirts being worn, banners and posters in every sight possible, but all for what? Five years ago I accompanied my older sisters to San Fernando's Annual March for Justice. Confused about what it means, so was I. I listened to various politicians speak along with our everyday average Jose. Through out their speeches they continue to mention a man named Cesar Chavez, they spoke about how the laborers and working community had rights and it was our duty to fight for them. We marched down the streets of our little San Fernando City chanting Si Se Puede (Yes we can) and El Pueblo Unido Jamas Sera Vencido (The people united will never be defeated.)

At that particular moment I was lost but simultaneously I was amazed beyond my understandment. As soon as I arrived home I questioned my sisters wanting to know more about the legacy of such a remarkable man. The more I heard of Cesar Chavez and the Farm Worker the more I was intrigued by them. They reminded me of people that I knew, hard workers simply trying to earn a living wage to put bread on their table.

Having a job, getting paid, and buying the necessities seems like a common story to many, but with the struggle of the farm workers I realized that there is still so much to do. As a result of this thought I decided to join the Cesar Chavez Commemorate Committee. I realized my place was helping put this great event together that reminds our community and its workers that they are not alone. And it was in our meetings that I met a Community Organizer from the Los Angeles Alliance for a New Economy (LAANE). The Cesar Chavez Commemorate Committee and LAANE have provided me with all the opportunities at a grass roots level I could have asked for. Because of such great organizations and people, I have been able to make a difference in a daily workers job. I have learned about labor cases, employers who must be stopped in order to stop the abuse, and best of all how to approach and issue that must be resolved (laborer to employer). But now I feel that I must commence a new journey in life, one that will have a greater impact in the world that surrounds me.

And the place for that voyage and growth is in Cornell University School of Industrial and Labor Relations. My past has provided me with unforgettable experiences that have shaped who I am and what I will fight for in life, but it is only my future that can give me the weapons to conquer the battles. The ILR School will provide me with the needed education to phase the world defending the rights of the labor force. With its six departments in one major program I will be able to study a broad of subjects that truly fascinate me, ranging from sociology, government, law, history, business, psychology and economics. This close-knit school will provide me with the attention that I want from my professors, the kind were they will know my name and I will not be just a number on a grade sheet. The kind were I can have a meaningful conversation with my classmates to the point to where they completely know who I am, but yet though be walking to my dorm and meet someone new everyday.

Being the only school of its kind ILR will be the stepping stone to what I plan to accomplish in life, a non-profit lawyer for the working community members. With its phenomenal program, I will be challenged to think and excel, preparing me for what's to come in Law School.

*btw any ideas for conclussions???????

falconchick 1 / 2  
Jan 1, 2009   #2
I think you could condense the second and third paragraphs into one. That would solidify the structure of the essay, and probably help with the word limit.

I love the beginning! The whole thing sounds personal and genuine. You took a great approach to such a vague prompt, nice job.
OP Flower Child 2 / 3  
Jan 1, 2009   #3
Thanks for the advice!!!!!!!!! truly helped!!!!!! I was able to cut it down to 505.
so would you say this is better?

At that particular moment I was lost but simultaneously I was amazed beyond my understanding. As soon as I arrived home I questioned my sisters wanting to know more about the legacy of such a remarkable man. The more I heard of Cesar Chavez and the Farm Workers the more I was intrigued by them. They reminded me of people that I knew, hard workers simply trying to earn a living wage to put bread on their table.Three years later with a greater understanding and a heart full of inspiration I joined the Cesar Chavez Commemorate Committee. And it was in our meetings that I met a Community Organizer from the Los Angeles Alliance for a New Economy (LAANE). The Cesar Chavez Commemorate Committee and LAANE have provided me with all the opportunities I could have asked for at a grass roots level, such as improving the quality of benefits for the working community. But now I feel that I must commence a new journey in life, one that will lead to greater accomplishments.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Jan 3, 2009   #4
Flower, you have a cool user name!!!

Yes, the first part is great...

And The place for that voyage and growth is in Cornell University School of Industrial and Labor Relations.

Ooops, you can't conquer a battle: My past has provided me with unforgettable experiences that have shaped who I am and what I will fight for in life, but it is only my future that can give me the weapons to win each battle. The ILR School will provide me with the needed education to phase the world defending the rights of the labor force. With its six departments in one major program I will be able to study a broad of subjects that truly fascinate me, ranging from sociology, government, law, history, business, psychology and economics.

At that particular moment, I was lost but simultaneously I was amazed beyond my understanding. As soon as I arrived home I questioned my sisters, because I wanted to know more about the legacy of such a remarkable man.

Yes, excellent, and your chosen work is meaningful! For the conclusion, sum up the central truth of the essay -- especially what specific qualities make this school exactly right for you.


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