Course 2-A of mechanical engineering department of MIT is an ideal program for me

Dec 28, 2012 #1

Although you may not yet know what you want to major in, which department or program at MIT appeals to you and why? (*) (100 words or fewer)

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Course 2-A of mechanical engineering department of MIT is an ideal program for me. I love machines and the fundamental principles on which they work. My desire is to understand these rationales, apply them and disseminate them to the future generations as a professional. I also wish to contribute the people of the world with an easier, an advanced and a prosperous life by creating many chef-d'oeuvre (or should I use masterpieces) in machinery. To fulfill my dream which is to achieve a profound knowledge in mechanical engineering, I need to be bestow from the best engineering school of the world i.e. MIT.

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Please provide any grammatical errors in essay ? Also give your suggestion.

sjmzzz95 7 / 13

Dec 28, 2012 #2

-an easier, advanced and prosperous life by creating
-the people of the world is weirdly phrased... maybe just society?

good ideas!!

rew2402 5 / 21

Dec 28, 2012 #3

an easier, an advanced and a prosperous life

easier, advances and prosperous.

i would say, use chef- d'oeouvre.

To fulfill my dream which is to achieve a profound knowledge in mechanical engineering, I need to be bestow from the best engineering school of the world i.e. MIT.

To fulfill my dream of achieving a profound kowledge in mech engr, i need to be ...
dont use bestow, replace the word.

OP Millin Gabani 10 / 22

Dec 28, 2012 #4

rew2402

To fulfill my dream of achieving a profound kowledge in mech engr, i need to be graduated form the best....

is this correct ???