I am cracking my head to figure out what is property and real estate - NUS App

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I think my essay is not good enough.PLEASE HELP ME WITH THIS ESSAY.

When I was waiting for my STPM result to be released, I visited my eldest sister in Johor Bahru. She is working at there as a clerk and part time property agent in a property agency namely WINZIA. I still remembered the first meeting she brought me into as an observer. The meeting is sort of an informal one, mostly focus on training new property agent. Throughout the meeting, I saw the quality of leadership shown by the professional team leader, Mr. Ho which is also superior of my sister guiding the whole team. He inspired the team with the slogan, "work hard, play harder" by covering part of the trip expenses for those who had hit the sales quota in the limited period stated as the team are going to Phuket Island in this coming July for relaxation. When they are talking about that trip, everyone seemed to be in a joyous and high spirit for fighting to hit the quota.

Ever since the meeting, I wondered what is property or real estate and I referred to my sister. She told me a lot but I still don't understand part of it, so I tried it myself by searching Google. Still, I am cracking my head to figure it out. Since I had developed interest in real estate, my sister encouraged me to take up the real estate course in the university later and upon graduation, I can join her company and take part in the 12 years Iskandar Malaysia project once I grab the chance.

Thanks for your help in advance!!!!

... it is not clear as to why she had you experience this.... Set up a link. For example, say that you were interested and she took you to a meeting as an observer. If you have a word count issue, you may remove the information that you give about your sister's workplace. It is not really relevant for this answer.

Ever since the meeting, I wondered what is property and real estate wereWhen I referred to my sister,she told me a lot about the field.but I still don't understand part of it, so I tried it myself by searching Google. Still, I am cracking my head to figure it out. Since I had developed interest in real estate, my sister encouraged me to study it in college and told me that, upon graduation, I can join her company and take part in the twelve-year Iskandar Malaysia project once I grab the chance.

This is pretty good, but I think you should explain more about why you like real estate and why you think it would be a good subject for you to study and pursue as a career.