Criticizing my music is like criticizing my personality; University of Illinois UC

Tell us about one interest or experience of yours that allows us to get to know you better as an individual. Please limit your response to approximately 300 words.

My right thumb grips my chin, as my fingers stay pressed against my lips. I am holding back. The person in front of me does not have the slightest idea how infuriated I am at this moment. He had just finished asking me if I have any good music. This is one question that one should never ask me. Criticizing my music is like criticizing my personality. Expressing your distaste for the songs that I listen to is telling me to my face that you don't like me because my music is who I am. I personally enjoy a variety of genres. Music reflects emotion, ideas, truths, but most of all passion. I look at myself as a very passionate person. If I choose to start a project or a task, I will push myself to complete that project or task to the best of my ability. In order for me to accomplish such a feat I need one thing. Music. It is my companion and helps me make it through the day, but it is also my coach. It pushes and motivates me to think, reason, perceive and understand better. Music inspires me to do so much more; to fly past the minimum requirements and excel. I look at some of the less motivated peers surrounding me and sometimes I wonder if it is because they suffer from a lack of passion, a disease of the mind known as hatred. Without the love that music spreads, there is only hate.

Well... I guess you should have been more specific about this experience. I mean, you should have presented it as an actual personal experience that really annoyed you and then continued to say why you were annoyed. These lines do not refer to any particular person and thereby give a vague feeling to the reader. Tell the reader that you had this encounter with so and so and how you felt about it. Then why you felt so is because you cannot separate yourself from music.