Daydreaming is the only place in the known three dimensions of Space in which we are allowed to defy the universal laws and to twist the fabric of time. Or to alter reality in a sense that is practically unfathomable and innumerable in possibilities. It is both a world and tool in which we have a sporadic grip on. In the busiest and utmost importance of ongoing events it takes over and pulls us away from reality. But in the most difficult of times it, too our will, permits us to craft a world that alleviates the pain we bear. The world formed is an escapee, it is like an ice pack on an injury, it lessens some of the pain, as daydreaming does to conflict that we face, but it does not fully recover until your body takes action as necessary, which parallel to real life situations; action is necessary. Daydreaming is a tool if used to your advantage. I see it as a schemer for it allows me to give birth to simulations. It allows me to plan strategically. It allows shapes my character. Daydreaming is an outlet for imagination, creativity, freedom in a spiritual sense. Whilst there is all the glam and glimmers in the real world, this concept and innate ability to perform mental acrobatics such as these surpasses any bounds. It is beauty to the eyes and defines freedom. It is a universe within a universe. It accounts for everything before our eyes and memory. It embodies perfection. And it is within our head we contain this powerful capability.
Daydreaming ; NYU Supplemental: What intrigues you?
You have very good diction.
In terms of an Idea perhaps you can use something specific that you daydream about as a hook, but make it interesting and then add a twist when you snap back to reality and then continue on "Daydreaming is the only place...."
Besides that I like it.
Itallows shapes my character
Daydreaming is an outlet for imagination, creativity, freedom in a spiritual sense. Whilst there is all the glam and glimmers in the real world, this concept and innate ability to perform mental acrobatics such as these surpasses any bounds
These two sentences are very vague and abstract, and I think you failed to convey a deeper message. Maybe rephrase them or delete them all together, I think they are a lot of fluff with no sustenance.
Good luck
In terms of an Idea perhaps you can use something specific that you daydream about as a hook, but make it interesting and then add a twist when you snap back to reality and then continue on "Daydreaming is the only place...."
Besides that I like it.
It
Daydreaming is an outlet for imagination, creativity, freedom in a spiritual sense. Whilst there is all the glam and glimmers in the real world, this concept and innate ability to perform mental acrobatics such as these surpasses any bounds
These two sentences are very vague and abstract, and I think you failed to convey a deeper message. Maybe rephrase them or delete them all together, I think they are a lot of fluff with no sustenance.
Good luck
Very nice and descriptive. I see no real deficiencies except that one grammar error pointed out before. Best of luck!