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"Speech and Debate" - I don't fear audience anymore!



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Dec 2, 2012   #1
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I stumbled into the classroom, running the points over and over through my head, wiping my sweaty palms, and prepared to speak. There was only one judge in the classroom but I felt an imposing audience bearing down on me. I scrambled to the judge whose expression seemed to show bitter disappointment and regret and greeted him with shaky hands. Needless to say, I struggled through most of the speech and recall more "um's" and "uh's" than substantive words but that day, I could sigh from relief. I could proudly exclaim I was a new man, a bold man. Not only had I achieved what many in the Speech and Debate club feared and strayed from, I had liberated my mind of my irrational fetters. Even today, my experiences as an extemporaneous speaker bear fruit. Not only do I have confidence in myself to speak eloquently, I have the drive, the desire, to venture outside of my daily activities and tread new waters. And I am proud to say, I have not again witnessed another disappointed judge.

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Dec 2, 2012   #2
Break the first line into two or more parts.

"Needless to say, I struggled through most of the speech and recall spouting? uttering? more "um's" and "uh's" than substantive words, but that day, I could sigh from relief." Again, this sentence could have two good short sentences

"I have the drive and the desire" Using "and" makes it sound better, and is a safer option if the reader is tired.

I don't really like the last line. It could be better.

Overall, it is good.


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