What in your opinion defines you as you?
Long Answer (1500 Character Maximum - includes all space, punctuation)
My Answer:
I believe I am defined by my characteristics, beliefs, and perspective, which depend on my cumulative experiences up to date. Much of who I am has been constructed during the formative years of my life. The elementary school years were where a majority of my morality, interests, and fundamental rationality was shaped. Such definitions of me include my compassion for people suffering from illness or pain, my habit of being kind and courteous to adults and friends, my interest towards music, my engrossment in natural sciences, etc. These qualities and individualities lead to my actions and separate me from others.
My secondary and middle school years were a development of my work ethics, self-control, social skills, and knowledge. In high school, I embodied the outgoing, initiative taking, and goal setting student. I allowed myself to be manifested in an academic environment, so that others and I could learn about me. My interest in science set itself on an academic and extracurricular level; I took the responsibility as an executive at A. Y. Jackson's biology club to direct experiments and group projects, while striving to achieve high grades in the classroom. My musical enjoyment led to the participation of our school's orchestra, choir, and band performances.
These characteristics, affected and built upon life experiences, are what causes me to think, act, behave, reason, and rationalize the way I do. These characteristics are also what define me.
Help:
Can you guys help me check spelling and grammar? I also need some help making this essay concise (to fit the 1500 character) and to the point, and to clear up any awkward vocabulary use. Thanks so much :)
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I agree with ParceledTongue, you can omit the "I believe" at the beginning.
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middle and secondary school years - put them in chronological order. Your entire paragraph talks only about your secondary school years though. Either incorporate middle school related things, or leave it out.
defined by my characteristics, beliefs, and perspective
So I see characteristics, but where is beliefs and perspective?
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