Hi there! I'm applying for the Yale Young Global Scholars programme, and this is the essay I was asked to write.
I have absolutely no experience in writing non-academic essays so I don't know what they're looking for. Since English isn't my first language there might also contain some mistaken use of language. I would really appreciate some feedback. Thank you :)
Please describe the factors that have most influenced you and your hopes and dreams. How have they shaped you?
In my 17 years of life, I would say that it is the people around me and the voices I have heard influenced me the most.
When I was a kid, I never actually considered my identity. I didn't know who I was nor did I care. I did somehow know who I wanted to be, or to be specific, who I wanted to be like -- my parents, mainly because I did not really know anyone else. Then I really looked up to my elementary school teachers, and started teaching my dolls the things I had learnt from my teachers. Looking back at that time now, I think most of my peers shared this passion of teaching, even though they probably had not been teaching their dolls.
Reading has also been helpful. I was fascinated to see how different people could be from my friends and me through a few pages. Sitting by a pile of books on a Sunday afternoon was so typical for me then. Truth to be told, I was quite a stubborn and single-minded child, however with the accumulating amount of pieces I had read and the voices I had heard, I gradually opened up my mind and tried to embraced the arguments controversial to mine.
When people coming from different backgrounds with different inspirations meet is when the most exchanges of ideas happen and when one can really find out more about himself/herself. Therefore high school has proven to be the perfect classroom for me. I spent the first half of high school in my hometown and will finish the last two years abroad. If the first two years was already socially educating enough (as it was), the first term abroad broadened my horizon even better. Being a boarder allowed me to spend a large proportion of my time with my schoolmates, whereby I got to find more about our cultural differences and begun to form something of a global perspective. Being around them made me think once again about who I was and what I would like to be. Someone was no longer whom I wanted to be like but whom I wanted to be.
There is a saying in Chinese translating into something like "to be influenced by what one constantly sees and hears" and I genuinely believe it. I am still quite like although different from my parents because I did spend the most of my time growing up with them. My classmates were also influential to my personality and I am genuinely thankful since they help me became less strong-headed. I was also able to find out who I had always wanted to be along the way - a thinker, a leader, and a listener. Still stubborn sometimes but have been trying to get better.
I have absolutely no experience in writing non-academic essays so I don't know what they're looking for. Since English isn't my first language there might also contain some mistaken use of language. I would really appreciate some feedback. Thank you :)
Please describe the factors that have most influenced you and your hopes and dreams. How have they shaped you?
"to be influenced by what one constantly sees and hears"
In my 17 years of life, I would say that it is the people around me and the voices I have heard influenced me the most.
When I was a kid, I never actually considered my identity. I didn't know who I was nor did I care. I did somehow know who I wanted to be, or to be specific, who I wanted to be like -- my parents, mainly because I did not really know anyone else. Then I really looked up to my elementary school teachers, and started teaching my dolls the things I had learnt from my teachers. Looking back at that time now, I think most of my peers shared this passion of teaching, even though they probably had not been teaching their dolls.
Reading has also been helpful. I was fascinated to see how different people could be from my friends and me through a few pages. Sitting by a pile of books on a Sunday afternoon was so typical for me then. Truth to be told, I was quite a stubborn and single-minded child, however with the accumulating amount of pieces I had read and the voices I had heard, I gradually opened up my mind and tried to embraced the arguments controversial to mine.
When people coming from different backgrounds with different inspirations meet is when the most exchanges of ideas happen and when one can really find out more about himself/herself. Therefore high school has proven to be the perfect classroom for me. I spent the first half of high school in my hometown and will finish the last two years abroad. If the first two years was already socially educating enough (as it was), the first term abroad broadened my horizon even better. Being a boarder allowed me to spend a large proportion of my time with my schoolmates, whereby I got to find more about our cultural differences and begun to form something of a global perspective. Being around them made me think once again about who I was and what I would like to be. Someone was no longer whom I wanted to be like but whom I wanted to be.
There is a saying in Chinese translating into something like "to be influenced by what one constantly sees and hears" and I genuinely believe it. I am still quite like although different from my parents because I did spend the most of my time growing up with them. My classmates were also influential to my personality and I am genuinely thankful since they help me became less strong-headed. I was also able to find out who I had always wanted to be along the way - a thinker, a leader, and a listener. Still stubborn sometimes but have been trying to get better.