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Describe interesting interaction you've had, who's the person and what's the nature (500) - Yale-NUS



melramadhani 16 / 46  
Oct 27, 2014   #1
Please describe an interesting interaction you've had with someone different than yourself. Who was the person and what was the nature of the interaction? (500)

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X is a strange, freak person. He doesn't think like normal people do, he has his own perspective as if he sees the world through some kind of fish-eye lenses. He talks and walks like a robot and unable to understand certain norms. His minor autism, combined with exceptional intelligence, should contribute to them. As the result, he doesn't have many friends. Rarely people understand his uniqueness, but I do. He's one of my best friend.

The first days in junior high school, I was told that it was difficult to understand what he talked, but we talked for hours when we first met in junior high school. We talked about one topic to another, and I found myself 'clicked' with him. I was amazed, trapped in curiosity by his unique perspective that I'd never found in anyone else. I also learned that he had no prejudgment in people, that's why he seemed very happy although many people avoid him. He made jokes that was surprisingly funny to me. Maybe deep inside, I am as freak as him!

We didn't send texts; he would quickly fill my inbox with his formal, unshortened texts. We just had conversations after school, sitting on our own bicycles as if we were going to go home but we didn't leave the parking lot until hours.

He left junior high school earlier because he took the acceleration class. When we meet again in the same high school, I found him to be school legend already. He turned off the electricity of the entire school for the sake of curiosity. He announced his unflushed poop in front of his class. He made the sharpest teacher in the school cry. His last record, he is the first student of my school to be accepted in Singapore's prestigious university.

We never talked in person anymore since he is now in NTU, studying computer science. But we still chat and exchange stickers regularly. Our conversation topic have changed from random matters to something technical like digital algebra and stuff, but the energy is still the same. He understands my obsession of studying abroad, thus he keep supporting me in my pursuit. He also send his lecture slides regularly to help me 'prepare for NTU', as he keep persuading me to go to the same university as him.

However, digital interactions are not as fun as real ones. I miss his freak, robotic gestures in walking and talking. I miss his funny curses for teachers he dislike. I miss his fish-eye perspectives. I wish I can reunite with him in Singapore next year as college freshman, although I have different university preference.

nshrestha 1 / 1  
Oct 27, 2014   #2
Your conclusion should be stronger. Maybe taking out the last sentence and ending on a stronger note. I really enjoyed the story! Also you could try and be a little more descriptive about when you first met him! Like the color of his shirt or how he looked.
OP melramadhani 16 / 46  
Oct 28, 2014   #3
Maybe taking out the last sentence and ending on a stronger note

How about this?

However, digital interactions are not as fun as real ones. I miss his robotic gestures in walking and talking. I miss his funny curses for teachers he dislikes. I miss his fish-eye perspectives. I wish I can reunite with him in Singapore next year as college freshman. We won't be in the same university as I have my own preference, but should that be a barrier?

and the descriptive correction :

The first days in junior high school, my friends told me that it would be difficult to understand his talks, but we talked for hours when we first met in junior high school in math club. He was the star in the club; he made it to the National Science Olympiad in Mathematics in elementary school, while I was just a newbie in Mathematics olympiad. However, I found myself 'clicked' with him; we were speaking in the same freakish language! I was amazed, trapped in curiosity by his unique perspective that I'd never found in anyone else. Later, I also learned that he had no prejudgment in people, probably because of his autism, that's why he could maintain his cool despite many people avoided him. He made jokes that was surprisingly funny to me. Maybe deep inside, I was as freak as him!


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