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'design and the Japanese culture' - Carnegie Mellon U Supplement



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Nov 23, 2012   #1
Please submit a one-page, single-spaced essay that explains why you have chosen Carnegie Mellon and your particular major(s), department(s) or program(s). This essay should include the reasons why you've chosen the major(s), any goals or relevant work plans and any other information you would like us to know. If you are applying to more than one college or program, please mention each college or program you are applying to. Because our admission committees review applicants by college and programs, your essay can impact our final decision. Please do not exceed one page for this essay.

My interest in design and the Japanese culture influence me to pursue Communication Design as my major and Japanese Studies as a minor. I anticipate creating works that illustrate my ideas, stories, and feelings. As I searched for an institute that cold prepare and enrich me for my goal, I discovered Carnegie Mellon and its distinguishable programs and faculty. After I attended an informational session at Irvine, California, I am sure that Carnegie Mellon is the right place to go. Carnegie Mellon offers the unlimited opportunities, creative atmosphere, and lively college life that I desire.

I developed my interest in art and design when I just started to sit straight. As my mom placed a magnetic drawing board in my little hands, I began exploring my artistic expressions that day. This incident served as an important stepping stone for me to become a passionate artist. My passion in design influences me to pursue graphic design as my major at the College of Fine Arts at Carnegie Mellon University.

I am drawn to the infinite electives Carnegie Mellon offers. I desire the freedom to choose form a variety of classes that can enhance my artistic skills as well as expand my artistic awareness. Carnegie Mellon offers a variety of useful classes that fulfill my interests in various fields, such as architecture, glass, calligraphy, photography, and packaging. In addition, I love Carnegie Mellon's emphasis on interdisciplinary studies, such as in art and technology. In this case, Carnegie Mellon fully prepares its students to work in the real world. Carnegie Mellon is a young yet strong university that I am excited to be a part of.

In addition to Carnegie Mellon's versatile curriculum, I am even more fascinated by its lively student life on campus. The affluent, safe, lively, and convenient neighborhood promotes sophistication and security that I desire as a college student. I especially love having the choice to take classes at 10 other nearby colleges, while still receiving credits for Carnegie Mellon. The friendly relationships between colleges encourage me to explore other institutions while being a part of Carnegie Mellon. Moreover, with over 250 clubs and organizations on campus, a Scottie (what a cute mascot!) will always find a home. The unbelieving inclusive atmosphere and active spirits Scotties share energizes me to be part of them. Just as I get excited for Carnegie Mellon's active student life, my mind was completely blown when I discovered Buggy. This unique activity at Carnegie Mellon is exactly what I would love to participate in. Even though I watched numerous Buggy videos on YouTube, I hope to experience the exciting tradition myself and witness the moment with my own eyes.

Apart from on-campus life, off-campus life is as exciting. At the informational session, I learned about students' easy accesses to amazing cuisines, entertainment, and attractions are other reasons why I am attracted to Carnegie Mellon. Convenient access to museums and galleries allow artists like me to be more exposed to other forms of art outside of the classroom. If I prefer watching sports over the weekend, I can choose from the Steelers, the Pirates, or the Penguins. I will have to choose from tens of choices of international cuisines. I can attend concerts around the corner. I can watch fireworks and enjoy being a part of a crazy festival. I can already imagine myself enjoying life at Pittzsburgh while studying my passion at Carnegie Mellon. I cannot wish for a more fulfilling college life.

I look forward to sharing my ideas as well as listening to others' through the artistic language. I anticipate enriching my artistic skills and awareness by learning form creative colleagues and staff at Carnegie Mellon. I am ready to witness the Buggy race with my own eyes. With all the opportunities Carnegie Mellon offer, I cannot be happier to become apart of the Tartans.

dumi 1 / 6793  
Nov 23, 2012   #2
I developed my interest in art and design when I just started to sit straight.

In my view, you should start the essay with this point.... then it will flow more interestingly and the committee would soon be answered why you want to pursue studies in your desired field

As I searched for an institute that cou ld prepare and enrich me for my goal with a wealth of knowledge and exposure ,

just a small typo :D .... "enrich with" not "enrich for"

As I searched for an instituteinstitution [/quote]--------- I feel the word "institution' is better

[quote=tchsrams11910] I discovered Carnegie Mellon and its distinguishable programs and facultyfaculties

After I attended an informational session at Irvine, California, I am sure that Carnegie Mellon is the right place to go.

session on what? better specify

Carnegie Mellon offers the unlimited opportunities, creative atmosphere, and lively college life that I desire.

---------- good !


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