[EDIT: I'd posted this up earlier, but for some reason the title got messed up, and I didn't know how to change that]
Some people say that for this kind of question, details and specific programs are good because they show that the applicant is interested, but others say that colleges already aware of their faculties and location, so the main focus should be personal. I came at it from a personal approach, but what do you guys think? Does anyone know what UChicago prefers?
Question 1. How does the University of Chicago, as you know it now, satisfy your desire for a particular kind of learning, community, and future? Please address with some specificity your own wishes and how they relate to Chicago.
All my life, I've always had desire to learn; I find everything interesting be it academics, art, a foreign language, video games, cooking, or even outlining a square with one index finger and a triangle with the other. It's exhilarating to try something new, and improve even if I'm horrible at what I'm trying. Recently, however, I realized that my environment has a big influence on this process. For this reason, I want to pursue a life at the University of Chicago. From everything that I have heard about this school, from reading the school website, and just from reading the application itself, I can tell that Chicago is a place that fosters creativity, a place that won't be bounded by conventions. In this place, I feel like I can explore, experiment, and find myself in the end.
I think you could find a better word when you say "big influence." It is too elementary if you get what I'm saying. Maybe even say "environment greatly influences this process." I'm not sure what you mean by "pursue a life." I think the ending is kind of weak. It seems to me that a lot of people will probably write about how they hope to find themselves. Your reasons for wanting to attend the school weren't specific enough. What have you heard about the school? What is on the website and what about the application informs you that Chicago fosters creativity? I would just try to dig down a little deeper if I were you, but overall a good start.
