Hello, I'm just looking for some quit critique for my first draft of my essay in response to "Describe a circumstance, obstacle or conflict in your life, and the skills and resources you used to resolve it. Did it change you? If so, how?". I'm looking to get into UT or A&M.
Around seventh grade, my grades began to drop and I noticed myself fall into a common teenage mindset of laziness and low academic willpower. My grades struggled during my attendance of a local private middle school called Sacred Heart, and playing video games all day during the summer wasn't really helping me achieve my ambition of getting into a great university to study a scientific field. Finally during ninth grade I decided enough was enough.
I studied harder than I ever had for my freshman year finals. For the first time I was putting in the work that I needed to put in to get somewhere with my grades and it felt great. That summer I turned my laziness into ambition. I began working out three days a week, so that during the break I wouldn't lose my sense of schedule, it would help me stay organized and give me something to focus on. I went every other day with a couple of friends, who pushed me along the path of working harder and improving myself.
I began spending some of my free time looking into Algebra 2 concepts as an introduction to what I would be learning that upcoming year, and all around preparing myself for classes I knew I may have struggled with. Defining a solid work ethic was huge for me. My newfound principles put my grades higher than they ever were, leading to my enrollment in all advanced placement classes, which I had never really been a part of before taking the initial steps towards improving my academic life. Although it took some time, I was able to overcome my procrastination and my lazy lifestyle. Through ambition and willpower I overcame this obstacle stronger than I was before, improving myself in different ways long the way. If I didn't push through and work towards my ambition, I wouldn't have gotten nearly as far as I am today.
Around seventh grade, my grades began to drop and I noticed myself fall into a common teenage mindset of laziness and low academic willpower. My grades struggled during my attendance of a local private middle school called Sacred Heart, and playing video games all day during the summer wasn't really helping me achieve my ambition of getting into a great university to study a scientific field. Finally during ninth grade I decided enough was enough.
I studied harder than I ever had for my freshman year finals. For the first time I was putting in the work that I needed to put in to get somewhere with my grades and it felt great. That summer I turned my laziness into ambition. I began working out three days a week, so that during the break I wouldn't lose my sense of schedule, it would help me stay organized and give me something to focus on. I went every other day with a couple of friends, who pushed me along the path of working harder and improving myself.
I began spending some of my free time looking into Algebra 2 concepts as an introduction to what I would be learning that upcoming year, and all around preparing myself for classes I knew I may have struggled with. Defining a solid work ethic was huge for me. My newfound principles put my grades higher than they ever were, leading to my enrollment in all advanced placement classes, which I had never really been a part of before taking the initial steps towards improving my academic life. Although it took some time, I was able to overcome my procrastination and my lazy lifestyle. Through ambition and willpower I overcame this obstacle stronger than I was before, improving myself in different ways long the way. If I didn't push through and work towards my ambition, I wouldn't have gotten nearly as far as I am today.