UC prompt 1
describe the world you come from, and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.
Hi, everyone. This is the rough draft of my essay for UC system and there are a lot of errors in this essay. Please tell me if the structure of this essay make sense and what else should i change?? THANKS!!!
I love charts and data. No matter they are pies or lines; I can always treat them like they are the most gorgeous paintings in the world, and analyze the data of the charts carefully. I still remember the days when I was a little boy, my mother used to work as an accountant in a small firm. Every now and then, she has to work late at home. By watching her finishing those complicated data and charts, I got deeply attracted to them, and that is when I started my indissoluble bond with statistics.
5 years later, I tuned 15. While most Chinese parents are worrying about if their kids have spent pocket money properly, my mother handed me the job to handle the monthly bills of my family, and this is what really initiated my interest in the fields of statistics and finance. In order to pay the payments before the due dates correctly, I had to calculate the exact sum of the utilities. I made a list with the due dates and the sum of each utility using Excel, and this was my first concept of Statistics.
During my sophomore year at high school, I took an optional course in Financial Statistics, because I thought that would be a great chance for me to learn more about this field. In this course, I was able to easily understand the concepts taught by the teacher, and I did exceptionally well in solving the practical problems assigned by my teacher. With the knowledge I learned during the course, I made my first investment in the Foreign Exchange Market. Although I only invested 100 dollars in Sterling, but with my accurate statistics analysis towards the market, I made 2 dollars out of 100 within 5 days. That is the first time I applied my statistics knowledge to the field of Finance, and I would never forget the excitement that this has brought me.
Now, I am no longer satisfied with my limited knowledge in the fields of statistics and finance, hoping to get into a college to get myself equipped with more professional knowledge. I believe that, with the things that I will learn in the future, one day, I can realize my dream of being an analyst in the Wall Street.
describe the world you come from, and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.
Hi, everyone. This is the rough draft of my essay for UC system and there are a lot of errors in this essay. Please tell me if the structure of this essay make sense and what else should i change?? THANKS!!!
I love charts and data. No matter they are pies or lines; I can always treat them like they are the most gorgeous paintings in the world, and analyze the data of the charts carefully. I still remember the days when I was a little boy, my mother used to work as an accountant in a small firm. Every now and then, she has to work late at home. By watching her finishing those complicated data and charts, I got deeply attracted to them, and that is when I started my indissoluble bond with statistics.
5 years later, I tuned 15. While most Chinese parents are worrying about if their kids have spent pocket money properly, my mother handed me the job to handle the monthly bills of my family, and this is what really initiated my interest in the fields of statistics and finance. In order to pay the payments before the due dates correctly, I had to calculate the exact sum of the utilities. I made a list with the due dates and the sum of each utility using Excel, and this was my first concept of Statistics.
During my sophomore year at high school, I took an optional course in Financial Statistics, because I thought that would be a great chance for me to learn more about this field. In this course, I was able to easily understand the concepts taught by the teacher, and I did exceptionally well in solving the practical problems assigned by my teacher. With the knowledge I learned during the course, I made my first investment in the Foreign Exchange Market. Although I only invested 100 dollars in Sterling, but with my accurate statistics analysis towards the market, I made 2 dollars out of 100 within 5 days. That is the first time I applied my statistics knowledge to the field of Finance, and I would never forget the excitement that this has brought me.
Now, I am no longer satisfied with my limited knowledge in the fields of statistics and finance, hoping to get into a college to get myself equipped with more professional knowledge. I believe that, with the things that I will learn in the future, one day, I can realize my dream of being an analyst in the Wall Street.