'Economics - my big passion' - NUS admission process

Economics is my big passion. You will never think it is just ordinary until you learned how my "economics sense" brings the brighter in my life. Since I was child, I am fascinated in economics. In my opinions economic is the special one, because if you want empower economic, it means you have to empower the competencies and the important one is "economics sense", a sense to catch the economic problem in real life and formulating the comprehensive method to resolve that. Because, carrying out an economic policy can only succeed if the people as the target have similar vision as well as the economic policy maker planned. So, I begin to maintain my potencies in myself to be an economic doctor who can make the prosperity to be come true. I endeavor struggle to have a compressive knowledge about economic. It is not instantly I get. I have read many books and doing exercises every day either economics or accounting. But, it seems equal to my sacrifices. I often get the highest and perfect mark in each daily examination. And The silver medal of National Economic Olympiad is the real deal for my long sacrifices. It is not the end of my struggle to be an economic doctor, my "economics sense" must be maintained. Since I was in junior high school, I catch many ideas to make researches based on my view of economic problem in my real life. Klithikan (a flea market) is my first capture as unique economic pattern that proves the economic principle. After that, many projects can be done based on "economics sense". By "economics sense", I can step Vietnam, Romania, South Korea, and USA. Instead, my society often give their trust to organizing some events to me because of the contribution of "economics sense" is able me to decide the choice wisely. Last but not least, economic no more than ordinary subject that can be empowered by each student, but only extraordinary student who has "economics sense" that will give big contribution to the world.

well you are switching a lot many times in the tense of the essay.
try to remain consistent with one tense.

Thanks for your feedback. Do i need to change the topic ? or it has good enough and can be made up ?

Economics is my big passion. Please allow me to show because You will never think it is just ordinary until you learned how 'the economic' brings the brighter in my life. My interest has begun since I was child. In my opinions, if you want empower economic, it means you have to empower the competencies and the important one is "economics sense", a sense to catch the economic problem in real life and formulating the comprehensive method to resolve that. I found this 'economic sense' since junior high school when I unintentionally captured a unique economic pattern that proves the economic principle in Klithikan (Flea) Market. That sense brought me to won of a biggest national research competition and set even senior highschool student aside. That turning point attracts me to learn economic further. I read many books and doing exercises every day either economics or accounting. I spend most my time learn that but I never felt wasting, it was lot of fun instead. As a consequence, I often get the perfect mark in each daily examination. And The silver medal of National Economic Olympiad is the real deal for my long sacrifices of playtime. It is not the end of my struggle to be an 'economic doctor', who cure the the economic illness that is showed by poverty and abnormal imbalance welfare, everywhere. I endeavor struggle to have a compressive knowledge about economic. A solution for the economic problem filled my mind, by combining technology and market to make a Future Market software, that allow people to do supermarket-shopping without even move their seats. It was appreciated internationally by winning a Competition in Romania. Then a lot of project was created as I never satisfied to always become better and better. So I got chances to present my thoughtful and creatively work to Romania, South Korea, and even USA to do a diplomatic matter. However, all of that didn't change me into a nerd. An unlimited networking and good partnership is the thing I must have. my society often give their trust for me to be a leader because indirectly, economic taught me decide the choice wisely. Last but not least, economic is only ordinary subject, but only an extraordinary student who has "economics sense" that will give big contribution to the world. Hopefully, by entering NUS, as the best Asian University, my dream to be economic doctor who can make the prosperity to be come true.

i have done another revised, please observe this !