idk if i wrote it good but here goes.
topic choose a experience or achievement, that impacted you.
When i read this topic many ideas popped into mind. I didn't know how or even what to write about. Until the one experience popped into mind. I said yes i will use it no one will have it, this will make me very unique. I know what you are thinking, ok so whats the experience? It was when i did my EMT ride along with a local ambulance company.
This goes all the way back to the days i was in the EMT class and we had to get our clinical hours. On this special day i did my usual routine, which was get dressed, go to school, and then go to the ambulance.This day was EMT appreciation day. Everything was going fine until we got a call about a stabbing victim. All of these emotions and feelings come to mind. once we got there the patient was going crazy cursing out everyone and trying to fight everyone because she didn't want to go to the hospital. We had to handcuff her to prevent her from running away and fighting.
That whole all changed my whole outlook on the healthcare field. It made me realize how life is very short and how incidents change your emotions. Also how drugs and alcohol effect a person mindset and actions. At the end of the day, life is short and everyone in the healthcare field wants the better being on someone.
When i read this topic many ideas popped into mind[/b ]. I didn't know how or even what to write about. [b]Until the one experience popped into mind. I said yes i will use it, no one will have it, this will make me very unique. I know what you are thinking, ok so whats the experience? It was when i did my EMT ride along with a local ambulance company.
This goes all the way back to the days i was in the EMT class and we (We who? perhaps I? My class?) had to get our clinical hours. On this special day i did my usual routine: which was get dressed, go to school, and then go to the ambulance.This day was EMT appreciation day. Everything was going fine (well) until we got a call about a stabbing victim. All of these emotions and feelings come (cAme, past tense) to mind. once we got there the patient was going crazy, cursing out everyone and trying to fight everyone because she didn't want to go to the hospital. We had to handcuff her to prevent her from running away and fighting.
That whole all changed my whole (be careful of repetition unless it's absolutely necessary for your message) outlook on the healthcare field. It made me realize how life is very short and how incidents change your(I would avoid second person, you who? me? your teacher? I suggest remove it) emotions. Also how drugs and alcohol effect (Affect, effect is a consequence of something, like: for every action, there is an effect) a person mindset and actions. At the end of the day, life is short and everyone in the healthcare field wants the better being on someone.
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1ST GREEN Many ideas popped and then one popped, I can get it, but consider revising to make it better because it's a little odd. Perhaps: " Many ideas came to my mind but one had to stand out" I don't know, I'm not even sure of whether you should keep those sentences, do you think that they are needed to are the insight your paper needs? If your answer is yes, keep them, if no, consider replacing them.
1st Red Souns really vernacular, for me it's too much for an essay. I would ommit that too, rather try something like: " I thought of that one experience: When I did my EMT RIDE..
Overall just add a little more insight and deph to it, I can read it and it's not boring, it's a nice experience... but I don't FEEL it, probably add how you felt? were you nervous? exited? what did you learned from it?
If you have any further questions, contact me. If you decide to make some corrections, I would like to check out your next or final draft of it just for joy.
Have a nice day, good luck.
This essay's topic was to choose a time when an experience impacts you. Many ideas came to mind, but one had to stand out. I didn't know how or even what to write about. Until the one experience popped into mind. I said yes I will use it no one will have it, this will make me very unique. I can only think of only one experience, when I did my EMT ride along with a local ambulance company.
This goes all the way back to the days I was in the EMT class and my class had to get our clinical hours. On this special day I did my usual routine: get dressed, go to school, and then go to the ambulance. This day was EMT appreciation day. Everything was well until we got a call about a stabbing victim. All of these emotions and feelings came to mind.
One minute I was happy and excited and next I got really scared and worried for the patient. Once we got there the patient was going crazy, cursing and trying to fight everyone because she didn't want to go to the hospital. We had to handcuff her to prevent her from running away and fighting. I was wondering why she didn't want to go, until I was informed she had drugs and alcohol was in her system.
That all changed my whole outlook on the healthcare field. It made me realize how life is very short and how incidents change people's emotions. Also how drugs and alcohol affect a person mindset and actions. Also I learned not to think about how bad the injury is,how nervous you are, but to make sure all of their needs are met. At the end of the day, life is short and everyone in the healthcare field wants the better being on someone.