Ethical arguments of our time/ Lehigh Sup - Values/priorities of my institution.

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THE TOPIC: If you founded your own college or university, what topic of study would you make mandatory for all students to study and why? What would be the values and priorities of your institution and why?

Though the likes of strict parents who indirectly govern our future may disagree, it is, and I say this with utmost importance, imperative that the testing minds of today take time to absorb themselves in the grandest and most timeless ethical arguments of our time. As a proprietor of an institution, I would make such a sentiment real.

Today, we are met with numbingly rapid change. Our secular obsessions, our ambitions, and overall desensitization lead us to rarely consider the magnitude of our individual decisions. By acquainting the facilitators of future advancement with the outfit for intellectual thinking, past their respective careers, society as a whole may reach a new height. The engineer may stress toward sustainability and environmental change. The doctor may focus on the patient, not the financials.The businessperson will think beyond his cubicle, and see a wider global perspective. With such a stress on ethics, we may begin to overcome impetuous thinking, rationalize, and be true... and though it's not perfect, it's a start.

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Honestly, I don't understand your essay. What topic of study did you choose? Ethics? testing mind? Although You stated it in the title, I think you need to state it in the essay too.

What's really hard to understand is the first paragraph, if you can fix that I think your essay will become much better.

Please help me too.

I meant to address ethics. I thought I made this clear...any suggestions?

That's the part that obstruct your statement about topics of study that you choose.
If I take the meaning right, I would make it like:

Though the likes of strict parents who indirectly govern our future may disagree, what's important today is insight about ethics, and the argument of them. As a proprietor of an institution, I would make such a sentiment real. (I can't make it more understandable, I think you can do better)

Well, I can't give a perfect example, but what I want to say is to clearly state ethics in the front can avoid confusion.