Everything starts from its core - Georgia Tech Short Answers

Stronger Core

Being able to create and innovate for better living, and contributing to projects that impact the masses in a daily basis is extraordinaire to me. Because of my interest towards creating a better quality of life along with my fondness of designing and building, I choose civil engineering. As a middle child, growing up, I have to admit "the mediator role" had some truth to it. But, rather than just being a mediator, I slowly developed a keen interest towards my subjects, the living species that I've also been classified as since birth, the human species. As I dove in further, I started to see the importance of the living environment to people, key parts of it, such as accessibility and efficiency. I realized that I've become more and more fascinated with the problems that civil engineers face every day. I strive not only to better understand how people maneuver life, but also to find potential external improvements, that can be made to push the betterment of quality of life.

Furthermore, I'm intrigued by the advantages that green buildings and sustainable designs can bring. I'm interested in the development of buildings that are environment-oriented, that includes the harnessing of local climate, sun position, wind flow, and other environmental factors, alike the Passivhaus and zero net energy homes. Also, I think improvement in public transportation is also crucial, especially because it helps to open connections to isolated areas. That is why, through civil engineering, I know that I can implement my thirst of improving living and passion for building. I believe that by enhancing the basic everyday needs, such as, infrastructure, transportation, homes, and other public areas, it can help jump start advancement in numerous other fields, as everything starts from its core.

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Note:Need another pair of eyes, please give me your opinions, any input is very appreciated.

I don't know if I succeeded adding the humor/sarcasm on the human species part.

Thank you :)

Salsabila, please provide the prompt that you are responding to. I can't really give you an accurate review and specific advice if I do not know what question you are trying to respond to or what you are trying to explain to the reviewer. While the essay does carry some humor to it, I am not quite sure if the humor is misplaced. That is why I need to read the actual prompt. I want to make sure that the type of response that you created is appropriate for the prompt. By the way, while a humorous paper is acceptable, a sarcastic paper is not. It would be best to avoid sarcasm at all costs because it may come across negatively to the reviewer instead of as a joke. At this point, I can't really offer a solid review and advice regarding the improvements to your response. I have to wait for the actual prompt to come from you first. Then I can better assess your response for relevance and other potential problems.

@Holt
Hi Holt, oh yes, I seemed to have forgotten the prompt, I just realized.

That's true. How should I use the humor part for it to be appropriate?

Thank you, for your input!

Here's the prompt:
What interests you about your selected program of study? (2000 characters)

If you would just remove the reference to the "living species" and the humor will be well placed. I am not sure though as to how your being a middle child "mediator" helps to explain your interest in civil engineering. It seems to me that the essay will be better written without that discussion in it. Actually, I find the first paragraph to be rather ill effective in this statement. It seems a little bit forced and the connection to your being a middle child did not help to add humor to the essay. In my opinion, simply stating your interest using the second paragraph would be more straightforward and sufficient to accurately respond to the prompt. Being a character limited essay, it is best to keep your response as short and direct as possible. You don't need to use all of the word count. Half of it used is good enough.