have had fall out on my grades through the semesters

emindreamz 1 / -

Dec 5, 2012 #1

The main reason being the sudden demise of my close friend that affected me very much and getting over this tragic incident took me a long time. this is the paragraph ive framed

I have had fall out on my grades through the semesters which was due to tragic demise of my close friend in a road accident, which affected me to the core. But slowly along with the support of my family I came out of it, bringing alongside into terms my friend's family. I have since then grown emotionally as a mature person. And emphatically I am onto upgrading my grades. I am aware that your university expects high standards from its students. On my part, I can assure you of my sincerity and hard work. I am confident that my enthusiasm will enable me to live up to your expectations. I sincerely hope you find my application worthy of your institution and grant me admission with adequate financial assistance.

Thanks for ua responses in advance!

dumi 1 / 6793

Dec 5, 2012 #2

I have had fall out on my grades through the semesters which was due to tragic demise of my close friend in a road accident, which affected me to the core.

The tragic demise of my friend in a road accident affected me to the core. My grades kept falling through the semesters.

But slowly along with the support of my family I came out of it, bringing alongside into terms my friend's family. I have since then grown emotionally as a mature person.

bringing alongside into terms my friend's family? What do you mean by this? It's not very clear!
My suggestion;
My recovery from this traumatic experience was pretty slow but I did with the bakcing of my family. However, with this process I grew more emotionally matured.