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In 2005, when I was eleven years old, my family bought a Japanese restaurant named "Ichiban." We turned the restaurant into a massive success; since then, it has received impressive reviews in the media. I help my family by performing the duties of a waiter, assistant chef, and manager.
I have achieved numerous skills from working at the restaurant. When I started, I was shy and nervous about interacting with the customers, but after more than six years of experience, I have gotten rid of my fears. Sometimes before my shift started, the sushi chef would teach me how to make sushi, a task that I had been dying to achieve for a while. Now whenever the restaurant gets busy, I can help relieve the chef's burden and please the hungry customers. Today, with school on one hand and managerial duties on the other, I have learned how to balance my schedule. My work experience has made me the person I am today: fearless, uniquely skilled, and organized.
In 2005, when I was eleven years old, my family bought a Japanese restaurant named "Ichiban." We turned the restaurant into a massive success; since then, it has received impressive reviews in the media. I help my family by performing the duties of a waiter, assistant chef, and manager.
I have achieved numerous skills from working at the restaurant. When I started, I was shy and nervous about interacting with the customers, but after more than six years of experience, I have gotten rid of my fears. Sometimes before my shift started, the sushi chef would teach me how to make sushi, a task that I had been dying to achieve for a while. Now whenever the restaurant gets busy, I can help relieve the chef's burden and please the hungry customers. Today, with school on one hand and managerial duties on the other, I have learned how to balance my schedule. My work experience has made me the person I am today: fearless, uniquely skilled, and organized.
