doing my personal essay on the person who has influenced me the most. its NOT FINISHED AT ALL! this is what i'm starting with. I just need feedback to know if i'm going in the right direction. No paragraph is complete, and i hope to have four+ paragraphs. PLEASE let me know what i could do to improve because i am a horrible writer. thank you
My Father, My Hero
Throughout a child's life their parents guide them into the right direction while being there every step of the way. My father made the biggest impact during my childhood, he was there to guide me to success which left a positive influence on me. At a young age I did not have a mother figure in my life, she unexpectedly walked out leaving my military dad with two young girls and it was up to him to take on the roles of a mother and father.
Unlike my mother, my father took on double amounts of work but he was still there to steer me in the right direction. He has always told me that no matter how hard your day may seem it will always get better if you think positive.
My dad would stay up all night just to help me with school work, when I couldn't understand he wouldn't let me give up. I would try and try and continuously fail because I wouldn't set my mind to something.
(last paragraph)
Words cannot express the things my father has done for me. Not only is he a father he is a hero, my hero.
My Father, My Hero
Throughout a child's life their parents guide them into the right direction while being there every step of the way. My father made the biggest impact during my childhood, he was there to guide me to success which left a positive influence on me. At a young age I did not have a mother figure in my life, she unexpectedly walked out leaving my military dad with two young girls and it was up to him to take on the roles of a mother and father.
Unlike my mother, my father took on double amounts of work but he was still there to steer me in the right direction. He has always told me that no matter how hard your day may seem it will always get better if you think positive.
My dad would stay up all night just to help me with school work, when I couldn't understand he wouldn't let me give up. I would try and try and continuously fail because I wouldn't set my mind to something.
(last paragraph)
Words cannot express the things my father has done for me. Not only is he a father he is a hero, my hero.