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A free ticket? Does not that sound inspiring? Trip to the capital of the Empire State of Mind



JoseGonzalez98 1 / -  
Oct 13, 2016   #1
You've got a ticket in your hand? Where will you go? What will you do?

A free ticket? Does not that sound inspiring? With a free ticket you can do a lot of things, but without a doubt the best way to use a free ticket would be by trading it for a trip to the capital of the Empire State of Mind, yes, I am talking about New York City

What would I do in the city that never sleeps? Therein lies the dilemma, better said what would you not do there?

The first thing I would do in New York City is walk all its endless avenues and crowded streets full of diversity and dreams from those that came to succeed, you might be walking and find a group of African Americans selling their new album of rap, while on the other side of the sidewalk people from India selling their traditional costumes.

Afterwards, I would take the subway at the 42nd street station in order to go to Downtown, where the presence of two continents is notable. In Chinatown, you cand find local food markets and cheap clothing stores, meanwhile one block away you can cross to Europe without having to leave the city, yes, I am talking about Little Italy, this magic place with many restaurants is the best place to taste the old world's culture.

Also, I would like to visit the place where two giants made of steel used to stand, to pray for the souls of those innocent people that were cowardly murdered and also to observe a minute's silence in memory of those lionhearted firefighters, police officers and paramedics that tried to save the lives of our brothers.

Once the night arrives, the city transforms totally and to witness that change I would go to the Brooklyn Bridge, from there, you can contemplate Manhattan's Skyline at night , which is such a lovely and unforgettable sight that I would never ever forget, ....

I do not know how to conclude, also I have several grammar mistakes and I would like to receive feedbacks in order to write this essay with a better word choice.

randompenguin - / 3  
Oct 14, 2016   #2
The content is okay and answers the prompt. To conclude the essay, you could summarize what do you plan to do in New York City: basically list down everything that you want to do in a quick sentence. I do not see much errors in punctuation and word choice.


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