My free time - hunching over my laptop, with my headphones on, messing around with my MIDI keyboard

Write a note to your future roommate that reveals something about you or that will help your roommate - and us - know you better. (100 to 250 words)

Dear would-be roommate

I very much look forward to meeting you. I am Vincent from Singapore. I am sure you are anxious to know what sort of person I am like and whether we would be compatible living together, just as I am. Let me tell you a little about myself.

In my free time you will see me hunching over my laptop, with my headphones on, messing around with my MIDI keyboard. I sincerely hope you don't see me as the typical nerdy Asian. I would do anything to dispel that stereotype. I will have you know that I am a wannabe electronic music producer, my playlist is only filled with electronic dance music, and in the club, look for me on the dance floor, not in the recessed corner. I would go to your friend's party if you invited me and I would love it if you invited your friends over to our room for parties on weekends; I would be happy to be the DJ.

I wonder if watching television is a staple for you, because if it is, I would love to share a Netflix subscription. We don't have that in our country though, so be warned that I may be addicted to it in the beginning. I love comedy, and am waiting impatiently for the next season of "Curb Your Enthusiasm". I am open to other genres though, just don't recommend "Game of Thrones". TV should be a platform of relaxation, not something that increases your cortisol level!

P.S. When we first meet, please do not mind if I get carried away inundating you with questions about your culture. I get excited when I meet a person with a culture different from mine, and it automatically makes that person interesting!

I think It has your personality and you shouldn't stress too much on something that is not you :)

Good luck with the admissions!

Excellent work! I am already looking forward to living with you and I am not even enrolled in your university. It sounds like you are going to be a fun and interesting room mate. I have to caution you though, there may be times when there will be cultural differences between the two of you so I think you should make reference to that in the letter as something that the two of you can also consider a bonding moment since you will be having a cultural exchange of sorts. Aside from that suggestion, I really think this letter is sure to relax your future room mate :-)

With that simple P.S. line, you have managed to let your room mate know that you are a person who is open to all avenues of learning and that you are willing to teach that person about your own culture as well. I don't see why you felt dissatisfied with this letter. It really is effective and presents you in a highly positive light. Whoever becomes your room mate should consider himself lucky. You are on track to being the room mate of the year in my opinion :-) The sentence structure is informal and allows for a more relaxed use of the American English language. There are some grammar corrections in order though.



- During my free...


Aside from those corrections, you should be very confident with the way that your letter will be received. There is nothing negative about it to be said :-)

I really can't thank you enough vangiespen!! Can you help look through my extra-curricular essays too for final corrections?

vangiespen, I had some last-minute questions before submission.

Regarding this paragraph:

Does the sentence "I would do anything to dispel that stereotype" make sense or even work in the context of this paragraph? I was re-reading it and thought it would be better to change it to "I sincerely hope you don't see me as the typical nerdy Asian, because I am going to dispel that stereotype."

Also, is the sentence "I will have you know that I am a wannabe electronic music producer, my playlist is only filled with electronic dance music, and in the club, look for me you will find me on the dance floor, not in the recessed corner." too lengthy and disorganized?

Thank you Louisa :) Can you take a look at my essay on extra-curricular activity? I would appreciate it!