The Admissions Committee would like to know more about you in your own words. Please submit a brief essay, either personal or creative, which you feel best describes you. :
Limit. Maximum. Boundary. Those words are mere illusions. The American Heritage Dictionary defines limit as a point, edge, or line beyond which something cannot proceed. However, I would prefer to believe the only true limits are those in mathematical equations, and even then there are exceptions to the rule. As cliché as it is, I was raised to challenge myself and to be diverse in my pursuits. This does not necessarily mean that I should take up every opportunity presented to me; nonetheless, I feel this means that I should fine what I'm passionate about and pursue it to the fullest extent.
One story in particular has inspired me to overcome any preconceived notions that may hinder me from reaching my goals. Misty Copeland, the first African American soloist in the American Ballet Theater, is an unlikely professional ballerina. Having begun her studies at the age of 13, the chances of her actually making it into a professional company were inconceivable. Despite her circumstances, Copeland dedicated herself to her art and trained consistently on a daily basis. After only four years of arduous training, she had been offered spots into several of the major ballet companies in America. Now, a decade after she set foot into her first ballet class, Misty Copeland is one of the most recognizable names in the ballet world.
Naïve. Idealistic. Irrational. Those are words that may describe my thought process. Once again, the American Heritage Dictionary defines idealistic as one who is unrealistic or impractical; visionary. However, I prefer to believe that vision only comes from realistic ideas. Roger Bannister, a visionary of his time, was the first to break the four minute mile. Since, the four minute mile has become the standard of all distance runners to follow. Ideas come from truth. It is just our duty to set a goal for ourselves, and make it a reality.
I really like your essay. I am not sure if you wanted feedback or not since you did not state that, but I don't see many errors, if any!
Keep up the good work.
Jenn
Limit. Maximum. Boundary. Those words refer to mere illusions. The American Heritage Dictionary defines "limit" as a, "point, edge, or line beyond which something cannot proceed."
Same for "idealistic." Put the word in " " marks and then put the definition in " " marks, too.
Great concepts here, but it is a bit general. Can you tie it in more with your academic and professional aspirations? :)
Hmmmm . . . the essay doesn't really tell the reader that much about you. You want to challenge yourself and you think like a visionary. As opposed to all of those other applicants who wrote about how lazy and conformist they were? The point of this sort of essay is to tell (or better yet, to show) the admissions officers who you are. This essay does not do this. Therefore, you should rewrite it, preferably focusing on relating some sort of demonstrative personal anecdote.
