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Why GIT (beyond rankings, location, and athletics) & Your Future after GIT - Georgia Tech



anfernee 6 / 19  
Oct 8, 2015   #1
1. Beyond rankings, location, and athletics, why are you interested in attending Georgia Tech? (max 150 words)

Though famous for its strong engineering program, I consider Gatech as a school that offers an interdisciplinary education on the ground of solid scientific and technological preparation. Through the study of industrial engineering, I am able to touch on various fields, be ready for challenges and challenges inside or outside the engineering field and decide a specific area to further my interest and tap my full potential. In addition to the abundant research experiences provided by world-renowned faculty, Gatech also provides me with Co-op programs that allow me to take my knowledge into practice in the real industry. What surprises me is the importance of global perspective in the curriculum of industrial engineering, because it encourages me see things out of the lab and even the industry to become a leader in a team and then in a larger scale. Thus, I believe that I can thrive in Gatech's community.

2. A Georgia Tech experience and education provides you an unbound future. What will yours be? (max 150 words)

After my college life in Gatech, I will fight, along with other ambitious alarmist here, against the limited, dried up resources. As an industrial engineer, I try to make the supply chain more efficient and thus lead to the energy economy. Incorporating other engineering fields through multi-sided exploration in Gatech, I want to conduct scientific research to simply the usage of solar energy. As an activist, thanks to the civic engagement during the four years in Georgia Tech, I will also start at a local team to raise the environmental awareness and then become a part of the global energy conservation movement. By using the skills gained beyond the lectures and group discussions, I will proceed my endeavors to contribute to the bigger world. Thus, my future will be a battle, eased by my cultivation in Gatech, because I will address the energy issue in a humane manner.

vangiespen - / 4077  
Oct 8, 2015   #2
Jize, look out for your tense usage. In prompt number two, you should have used the future tense in constructing the following sentence:

I try to make the supply chain more efficient

It should be written as:" I will try to make the supply chain..." since you have yet to accomplish or enact this action.

Here are some more corrections :

I want to conduct scientific research to simply SIMPLIFY the usage of solar energy.

thanks to the MY civic engagement during the MY PAST four years in Georgia Tech

I will also start at a local team to raise the environmental awareness

By using the skills THAT I gained beyond the lectures and group discussions,

I will ENSURE THAT proceed my endeavors WILL CONTINUE to contribute to the bigger world.

I hope I was able to help finalize your statements :-)
OP anfernee 6 / 19  
Oct 8, 2015   #3
Thank you so much! Do you think that after the grammar correction, the two short essays are ready to submit?


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