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Lilly245 1 / 3  
Jan 3, 2013   #1
What is your top ten list? Elaborate on #4. This section is to give you the opportunity to distinguish yourself fro other applicants, allowing us to get to know you better. please be creative and enjoy this exercise.

Top Ten Ways to Change The World

Here are the top ten ways I believe we can embark on the grand adventure into changing the world.

10. It's better to give than receive.
Donating your time, energy, blood, hair, money etc. to a good cause. Become a regular volunteer and give. Helping others allows you to capture the great feeling of putting others first. We are a society and we all inhabit one planet, earth. We will fall as a whole, but we will rise as a whole.

8. Pay it Forward
Return the favor or start the movement of kindness. Based off the movie "Pay it Forward," a young boy starts the movement that is soon reached worldwide and it all started with one act of kindness.

9. Create Art.
Through paintings, drawings, photographs, and sculptures our society has taken up art as method of communication towards their peers. Art itself motivates and inspires the human race to grasp the concept of humanity and alter the negative in society into a euphoria filled with endless possibilities of happiness.

7. Be Inspirational.
Change the world by stimulating your peers to defeat the status quo. Embark in new challenges and do things people never even thought of. Never allow someone else's pessimistic attitude thwart your ambitions.

6. Listen.
Hear out your neighbor let them tell you about themselves. Know about their interests and carry this behavior throughout your life and care to listen to each and every person that meets your eyes.

5. Acceptance.
While each of us inhabits this planet we deliver a dose of uniqueness into our world. Being able to accept each other's differences and embrace them is a step closer into cultivating and embedding ourselves with one another.

4. Peace, Love and not War.
This clichĂŠ is seen throughout the world. We find ourselves grinning when we find the quote on t-shirt, a coffee mug, or a poster, but the quote itself serves as a common belief to anyone who has ever been touched by war and corruption. While our troops fight for many different reasons have you ever wondered what would happen if there were nothing worth fighting for or worth killing for, where would the concept of war lie? We will no longer take innocent lives and we would be abiding by one of our ten commandments "thou shalt not kill." Global giving and peace is a concept we should be promoting.

3. Share and stimulate your interests
Voice who you are and what characteristics create you. Talents and skills are uniquely divine share yours and encourage others to do the same.
2. Do Something!
If your intentions are good and are to better society, never give up. Keep your goal alive. What are some things you would like to change about the community you inhabit?

1. Vote.
Changing the world you live in begins with vote. Vote for a candidate that stresses your needs not one filled with empty promises. Changing the world begins with those who represent you.

notdisha 1 / 2  
Jan 4, 2013   #2
Sound alright! Some points overlap a bit, and there may not be anything too original here- I would suggest editing it to 5 things to change the world. Like Vote (strong point) can be clubbed withing do something. This will give structure to the more vague points, and will help you edit the essay, to make it tight!
moon05 13 / 132  
Jan 4, 2013   #3
We are a society and we all inhabit one planet, earth. We will fall as a whole, butagain/and we will rise as a whole.

Either you have placed number 8 before 9 or you have written the numbers in the wrong place. Correct that for the final version.

Based offon the movie "Pay it

a young boy starts the movement that is soon reaches worldwide

our society has taken up art as a method of communication

society into a euphoria, filled with endless possibilities of happiness.

Hear out your neighbor, let them tell you about themselves.

Know about their interests and carry this behavior throughout your life and care to listen to each and every person that meets your eyes.

too many AND. Think of changing that

You use the word INHABIT too much try using something instead of that.
I would say the same thing that it doesn't seem too original. Oh and at first I thought that by top ten list it was indicating top ten colleges of your list!
hughj 2 / 21  
Jan 4, 2013   #4
#9 the word peers refers to people the same age. change euphoria to something about envisioning a utopia.
number 8 comes before 9 in this.
#7 Inspire! would be a better title.
#5 use the word understanding somewhere
#4 kind of makes you sound naive. you should try to show deeper understanding of the complexities of this issue.
#3 value your interests and be adventurous
1# begins with vote. voting. advocate, and politically active are some good words to through in.

You should definitely rethink some of these. Be more creative! this thing is asking for you to be funny!!!


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