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You may use your personal statement to highlight special interests, talents, goals or unique experiences (500-word maximum)
I planted my feet firmly on the ground, as I raised my stick in attempt to block off the six foot tall girl charging toward me. I squeezed my eyes shut in preparation for what was about to occur; before I knew it, I was knocked down to the floor with instant pain running through me. The whistle blew signifying that she had score, cueing the cheers of the opposing team. I laid on the cold, wet grass wondering what I had got myself into; I was no lacrosse girl. I could barely properly hold the stick right. But as much as I wanted to quit, I knew that was not an option. I had finally committed myself into trying something new.
I was never supposed to play lacrosse; in all honesty, I never heard of the sport before my friend began gushing about how great it was. She was in charge of recruiting the next season's Junior Varsity team, and I seemed to be next on her list. I refused a countless number of times, stating how I lacked of physical ability, and basic reflexes. Alas, that did not stop her until I had finally agreed in an attempt to get her off my case.
I distinctively remember the first day of conditioning; the coach was already irritated at the amount of girls arriving late and for punishment, he ordered us to run four laps around the track. As I began my second lap, I felt my heart beating furiously with pain shooting through my side. I went up to the coach and lied straight to his face, stating that I had a dentist appointment to go to. Oblivious to my lie, he agreed and shouted "see you tomorrow then!" I dreaded those words, as all I wanted to do was quit.
That night, I laid on my bed, furious at myself for quitting so easily. I was capable of doing those laps; sure, it would take some time and eating right, but nothing else was stopping me from completing them. I began reminiscing my past activities I had quit so easily; tennis, piano, ballet, soccer, everything I tried I had quit without fail. "No" I thought to myself. This time would be different. No matter how painful or dreadful lacrosse may be, I vowed to myself that I would complete the season without any quits whatsoever.
After three months of attempting to learn to cradling, catching, and the defense position, I knew terrible at the sport. But, I learned how much I enjoyed the adeline rush of going onto the field and playing the sport. All my life, I had walked away from a countless number of activities because I was afraid of failing and being bad at it; when I finally faced my fears, I understood how amazing a new experience and not giving up could be. Although my schoolwork has prevented me from continuing this newfound passion of mine, I now know that trying new things can lead to another interest that can truly change your life.
Thanks!
You may use your personal statement to highlight special interests, talents, goals or unique experiences (500-word maximum)
I planted my feet firmly on the ground, as I raised my stick in attempt to block off the six foot tall girl charging toward me. I squeezed my eyes shut in preparation for what was about to occur; before I knew it, I was knocked down to the floor with instant pain running through me. The whistle blew signifying that she had score, cueing the cheers of the opposing team. I laid on the cold, wet grass wondering what I had got myself into; I was no lacrosse girl. I could barely properly hold the stick right. But as much as I wanted to quit, I knew that was not an option. I had finally committed myself into trying something new.
I was never supposed to play lacrosse; in all honesty, I never heard of the sport before my friend began gushing about how great it was. She was in charge of recruiting the next season's Junior Varsity team, and I seemed to be next on her list. I refused a countless number of times, stating how I lacked of physical ability, and basic reflexes. Alas, that did not stop her until I had finally agreed in an attempt to get her off my case.
I distinctively remember the first day of conditioning; the coach was already irritated at the amount of girls arriving late and for punishment, he ordered us to run four laps around the track. As I began my second lap, I felt my heart beating furiously with pain shooting through my side. I went up to the coach and lied straight to his face, stating that I had a dentist appointment to go to. Oblivious to my lie, he agreed and shouted "see you tomorrow then!" I dreaded those words, as all I wanted to do was quit.
That night, I laid on my bed, furious at myself for quitting so easily. I was capable of doing those laps; sure, it would take some time and eating right, but nothing else was stopping me from completing them. I began reminiscing my past activities I had quit so easily; tennis, piano, ballet, soccer, everything I tried I had quit without fail. "No" I thought to myself. This time would be different. No matter how painful or dreadful lacrosse may be, I vowed to myself that I would complete the season without any quits whatsoever.
After three months of attempting to learn to cradling, catching, and the defense position, I knew terrible at the sport. But, I learned how much I enjoyed the adeline rush of going onto the field and playing the sport. All my life, I had walked away from a countless number of activities because I was afraid of failing and being bad at it; when I finally faced my fears, I understood how amazing a new experience and not giving up could be. Although my schoolwork has prevented me from continuing this newfound passion of mine, I now know that trying new things can lead to another interest that can truly change your life.
