'Growing up in Cerritos, CA' USC COMMON APP SUPPLEMENT extracurricular experience

Growing up in Cerritos, CA, I was fortunate to actively participate in youth and league sports, spending most of my time on the basketball court. I recall the joy I felt in shooting hoops, practicing with and learning from my teammates, and applying pointers from my coaches. Several years later, I realized the rules of the court defined much more than how I played my game; in fact, they shaped my sense of self and character, instilling in me focus, drive, and confidence. It's for exactly this reason that I chose to pay forward this tremendous contribution to my life by coaching, refereeing, and officiating basketball for the same city that raised me.

Being a referee for the Cerritos Sports Complex has been one of my most valuable personal and leadership experiences. While my job description may simply require that I abide by the rules and make the right call, my real responsibility is to the players. Knowing the game is merely a starting point to tough calls; the real challenge is ensuring the children, teenagers, and communities I support are safe and in strong spirits under my guidance. This is my number one priority.

NEED TO ADD IN CONCLUSION / TIE TO USC.

Give an example otherwise it is too general.


This is grammatically incorrect. I can only vaguely understand that you are repaying the benefit that basketball has given you by coaching, refereeing, and officiating basketball games.

I like the second paragraph but you should add a conclusion. You may write about what effect refereeing has had on you to finish off but its up to you.

In terms of content, this essay is absolutely perfect. You discuss the activity, but more importantly, talk about its greater significance to you. Well done. -Admissions Advice Online