"I hail from Iran"; Illinois Common App/ impact of upbringing and experiences

how your upbringing and experiences impacted who you are, your future goals and the choice of your major?

id' appreciate to know the weaknesses and the good things about my essay thx.
I hail from Iran, where my family has lived for generations. They allowed me privileges that were perhaps not available for many other girls in the traditional Islamic country: freedom of speech, the strong urge to actualize my dreams and the opportunity to excel at English as a foreign language. Last but not least, their divorce taught me to be independent as I had to do a part of housework besides my chores and I also had to fend for myself.

When I was fifteen, I was unable to run a program on my computer because of an error. I could not fix the error so I posted a question on Yahoo! Answers. A polish man replied right back and following the instructions he gave me I ran the program. I could speak English well enough to communicate with him easily so I got to know him more as I wanted to expand my world and communicate with people from different cultures nationalities. He was a computer science student, a major that was not offered in my country. He taught me C++, his favorite program to introduce aspects of his major to me. I enjoyed programming very much so I spent many days programming the functions I had learnt in Calculus classes. Soon everyone realized my affection for computer science and I was chosen as the teacher's assistant for computer department of my high school.

Can i sum it up and say my goal is to live a happy life and programming makes me ahppy the first place? then i want to help people and inform them by just working in networking field and provide accessible information for everyone? or it's better to say i like ur uni cz it has the 3rd largest library and i wanna research and communicate with the diverse student community of your uni?

I was unable to run a program on my computer due to some error.


I got an immediate reply from a Polish person and by following his instructions I fixed it myself.


.... this needs improvement;
My fluency in English helped me becoming better acquainted with him that helped me expand my world to interact with people of diverse cultures and backgrounds.