University of illinois/ Impact of past experiences

Dec 21, 2012 #1

1.How have your past circumstances and experiences (such as your upbringing, community, and/or activities) impacted who you are, your future goals, and your choice of major? If you haven't decided on a college or major yet, briefly explain your intentions and aspirations for your first year at Illinois. Please limit your response to approximately 300 words.

i am not a native english speaker so i wont' get offended:) i need your help both with content and structure! thank you:)

I spent most of my childhood tending to my plants and pets while other four year old girls played with their Barbies. Being the only child, I had to remember to complete all of my chores or they would be left undone. When I got a little older, my hens started laying eggs and to avoid throwing them away, I sold the eggs to my neighbors and saved up the money. The money came in handy a few years later when I went to a shop with my father and saw a 1000 piece puzzle that I take my eyes off of the puzzle but my father refused to buy it because of its rather high price tag. Ultimately, I bought it with the money I had saved.

In middle school, I needed help with my computer and met a Polish man online to help me. He majored in computer science. I searched computer science online as it was not offered in Iran and compared it with similar majors such as Information technology. Wojtek taught me C++ and I learnt it passionately. I was going to pursue Computer Science as my major. Later I became the teacher's assistant for computer department of my high school and it was the reason I became doubtless that my choice of major was appropriate.

Computer science is my ultimate choice because I always believed I should learn something new every day not to be the person I was, yesterday. Therefore, I have stepped into chemistry, drawing, music, cooking... I am a problem solver, a patient person who enjoys logic and finding relationships among facts. Many find computer unsatisfying because it takes a lot of critical thinking and time to write programs but those reasons are what fascinate me.

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Dec 21, 2012 #2

I spent most of my childhood tending to my plants and pets while other four year old girls played with their Barbies.

As a child of four years, my time was mostly spent on nurturing my plants and pets while the other girls of my age played with their Barbies.

Being the only child, I had to remember to complete all of my chores or they would be left undone.

This fails to set up a clear link with the previous sentence. There's something missing :(

When I got a little older, my hens started laying eggs and to avoid throwing them away, I sold the eggs to my neighbors and saved up the money.

avoid throwing them away?I feel you better not include this part.