(harry potter, newspapers, no hope, volunteering, Beatles) Stanford Responses

Name your favorite books, authors, films and/or musical artists:

The Harry Potter series will forever be one of the classics. It is a symbol of both my childhood and a generation as a whole, and it will always be among my favorite movies and books. I can't wait to read them to my kids. Lately however, the Hunger Games have replaced my Harry Potter addiction.

What newspapers, magazines, and/or websites do you enjoy?

The Times, CNN.com, People Magazine, What White People Like, Texts from Last Night, Twitter, Pinterest, Yahoo Answers because it has every known answer to every known question, Amazon for my book addiction.

What is the most significant challenge that society faces today?

The biggest issue facing society today is the lack of hope. People used to think they could actually do something good and affect change to better the world. Now, as we hide behind the Internet, no one takes the time nor energy to truly and whole heartedly believe in anything anymore.

How did you spend your last two summers?

D.C. and Teen Volunteering at Athens Regional. Through both I have honed my skills as a leader and piqued my interest in health professions. I taught violin lessons, volunteered at the animal shelter, and successfully refined my baking skills.

What historical moment or event do you wish you could have witnessed?
The last Beatles performance on the roof of Apple Corps in London. Enough said.

What five words best describe you?
Motivated, Sarcastic, Odd, Adventurous, Passionate

***I want to be a little bit more sarcastic and witty but I'm not sure how far I can/should go with it.. I'm not really liking my biggest issue response either. Any suggestions/advice? Thanks!

(shouldn't it be more formal?)

Hannah

I'm not really sure how to judge/grade these tiny titbits per-say...I'll just give my two cents here and there.


should be effect or another word, the sentence itself is quite weird-sounding.

Mhmmm, maybe for your biggest issue response you should be more genuine. Sit down and really think about what bothers you/is a significant challenge about society. If you are writing about something that you are passionate about, your fervour/enthusiasm will come through!

There is some form of humour/wit going on: yahoo, enough said, Amazon book for my addiction.

Hope this helps! If you wouldn't mind, could you look at my common app. essay. Thanks!

Thanks to you both! I'll make those necessary changes and I'm looking at y'all's posts right now!

1) Stuff White People Like is hilarious, but I wonder if that's not sending a mixed message about your Korean background. Also, it hasn't been updated in nearly a year, so the reference seems dated. You could replace it with White Whine or First World Problems.

2) There is absolutely nothing wrong with saying you like the Hunger Games, but it sounds a bit like you're jumping on the bandwagon because the movie is coming out. Of course, I don't know you and I can't make this assumption, but the adcoms might, and that's a risk. At least you didn't say Twilight.

3) Texts From Last Night is hilarious. Have you seen Disney Ladies From Last Night? It's beautiful stuff.

4) "[N]o one takes the time nor energy to truly and whole heartedly believe in anything anymore" -- that's a bit of an absolute. Maybe you could say, "fewer and fewer people are ..."and so on. Also, it's "neither x nor y."

I like the answers you put and they seem witty enough its just that it seems that these are thigs that everybody likes.Well at last I like all these things but maybe you should try to change some of the more common ones. Even then I still can't see anything wrong with them.