Having tough Parents ; UCF

Growing up my parents would be very tough on my siblings and me. I would cry and ask ; why are you guys so hard on me? A typical response would be of them trying to prepare us for when it's time to leave home. Looking back on those years I wished I would've listened more about somethings they would tell me. Yes I've kept okay grades and stayed focused, but right now I feel nervous about letting them down. When haitian parents are dissapointed in you it hurts your heart. I want to be accepted to a college and go off and show them that I can do what they prepared me to do. I want to let them be proud.

Before my parents left Haiti to move to America, they experience less fortunate childhoods. My father especially had it hard with never meeting his father and his mother passing when he was nine. Him and his older sister were left to support and raise their siblings. My mother struggled told me how she had to stop attending nursing school because she had a difficult time paying it. She would call relatives in America to ask to send over money, but even through that she could not finish. She and my father came here when she had only two years left in the program. The part of their history that really drives me is how far they have gotten. They may not have gotten the chance to attend a huge University or have a high-paying career. But they managed to evolve and create a life here and have and support their own children. And to that I owe them my future success and more.

Hi Ketura,
Is this a general question asking why you are applying to UCF? The second paragraph gives your background 9from Haiti) and how your parents hard work motivated you to strive (and presumably, apply to college.) The first sentence in the beginning paragraph sets a negative tone, You might consider switching the paragraphs, so you can explain why your parents were tough on you, and how you worked hard and grew strong enough to apply to college. Some mention of what subjects you like and why UCF would be most welcome!

Good continuation!

Okay thank you!!!