hopefully it is crazy enough to work ... penn state personal statement

i was watching tv and a funny commercial came up. My very conservatice father looks up at me to see why im laughing. he looks at the tv and then the commercial changes. all he sees is a bra commercial that had just come up. he looks at me once more, only to see me still laughing about the last commercial. what im trying to say is that at times i could be misunderstood. Also, i doubt that you will have somebody else that would write something like that to represent themselves in a personal statement. i could have the potential to bring a tad bit of diversity

I don't like it, I don't think they would think this is funny, but rather immature

i agree with catherine.

Ditto

ehhhh not good my friend. I understand your strive for originality, but first of all, dont actually make it so distinctive (i doubt that you....in a personal statement) Admission officers will look at it and think it's dumb. Second of all, I hope your planning on making this gramatically correct. (Try starting sentences off with capital letters)Third of all, just get rid of this whole statement. You wont be bringing any diversity once your not admitted. Good luck to you. (I'm applying to Penn State UP btw)

Yes, your essay does not treat the topic with the seriousness and respect it deserves. Try writing something with more depth to it, then reposting.

If you have a high enough GPA, class rank, and an SAT in the middle 50% range, then you don't really need to submit this personal statement (which is optional for pennstate) for admission. In fact submitting something of this nature will probably hurt your chances because it makes you look sound immature. If you really want to show how diverse you are, try to show some unique, yet positive aspect of your character that will distinguish from the thousands of other applicants.

I'm not gonna even bother to point out the grammatical errors in this statement. You should just scrap this idea all together and start over again, just like gkayson and catherineb said. Good luck

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