For many reasons, I would love to be a member of the Rice undergraduate community including housing, location, and academics. First, the residential college system appeals most to me. Coming from a small New England town, I am accustomed to a close-knit community. The residential college system would give me that same "small-town" feeling, while being a member of a large, private research community. I could have a rich social life with many extracurricular activities surrounded by a diverse group of students within my college. Moreover, I would still have the opportunity to be a member of the larger community that is Rice University. In addition to the residential colleges, location is very important to me. With its short distance to the city of Houston, the number of resources available to Rice students exponentially increases. This pulsing and thriving city proves to have numerous opportunities for college students through internships, at the nearby medical center for a potential bioengineering major, or at many of the large companies in the city. Also, there are thousands of restaurants, shops and museums, and many sports teams that are great for college students to take advantage of while not in the classroom. All of these reasons along with the rich academics, research opportunities, impressive student to faculty ratio and all around school spirit at Rice make it a perfect fit for me.
Housing, Location, and Academics; Why Rice?
AlsoI think "in addition" might be better or you could say "There are also" , there are thousands of restaurants, shops and museums, and many sports teams that are great for college students to take advantage of while not in the classroom.I think the whole sentence is a bit long/wordyAll of these reasons along with the rich academics, research opportunities, impressive student to faculty ratioIn my opinion since these are the most important things you shouldn't say along with as that suggests they're not that important. Then again I may be wrong. . and all around school spirit at Rice make it a perfect fit for me
I think your essay is great and I really couldn't find anything wrong with it. The things I mentioned are mostly about preference rather than actual grammatical errors.
Good Luck!
Also, there are thousands of restaurants, shops and museums, and many sports teams that are great for college students to take advantage of while not in the classroom.
I would try to make the last item of this list (currently sports teams) more academically-related. Perhaps libraries or educational resources.
Similar to my essay for Boston, I think you could benefit from more specifics as it does seem applicable to most large colleges. Other than that, it was great!
I think that there is room to expand more on the points you made, unless there is a word limit. Overall it is a well written essay that expresses your interest in the college. Good job!
