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My Indian Heritage; Rutgers / diversity (trip to india!)



nakulisbrown 2 / 2  
Nov 22, 2009   #1
Rutgers University is a vibrant community of people with a wide variety of backgrounds and experiences. How would you benefit from and contribute to such an environment? Consider variables such as your talents, travels, leadership activities, volunteer services, and cultural experiences. Only personal essays submitted via our website will be considered. You may enter a maximum of 3800 characters including spaces.

The contributions I could make to Rutgers University stem from my culturally varied upbringing. After spending my first four years around Europe, I began public school in Omaha, Nebraska.

A fond memory of my first day remains: a classmate questioned my spelling of "mum", which is "mom" in America; this was the first of many discrepancies which, as I grew, ultimately gave me a more expansive world view than many of my peers. More incongruity arose when my family moved once again, from Nebraska to New Jersey. Even within the nation, the difference between the two societies was as pronounced that between Ireland and Omaha. Massive factories straddling four-lane highways, cities teeming with people scurrying about, pollution the likes of which I had never seen: New Jersey had them all. Nonetheless, just like Omaha, I learned from my environment and acclimatized over time.

What has contributed to my perspective more than anything else, however, is my Indian heritage. Reinforced by my parents, this aspect of my life has always been with me, and juxtaposition with my setting - whether Nebraska or New Jersey - never fails to be an eye-opening experience. One particularly noteworthy example was a vacation to India during the summer before my sophomore year of high school. My parents would not arrive until weeks after my brother and I did, and those weeks were spent being juggled between primarily Hindi-speaking relatives.

Here, my inability to speak Hindi well proved to be a significant obstacle. Immersion in a society driven by an unfamiliar language inhibits interactions, but in turn promotes analysis. Indian society was truly very different from American, and as I spent that vacation observing unfamiliar monuments, eating in unfamiliar restaurants, and communicating with unfamiliar people, I developed a sense of humility. I could grasp a concept that seemed incomprehensible before: there is far more to the world than your present society. Beyond the factories of New Jersey, beyond the vast fields of Omaha, there is still more; and even beyond foreign, incomprehensible, India, there is more.

As such, what I could contribute to the environment in Rutgers University is more than one specific interest or subject; I can use my multiculturalism to connect with new people. Students and teachers alike all come from their own backgrounds, and a fascinating experience exploring my background motivates me to understand others' and explore further. The same concepts of wonder and worldliness that arose from my trip to India drive me to Rutgers, a microcosm of the world. As I find my past cultural experiences invaluable, the diversity on campus will undoubtedly widen my perspective of the world even farther. Needless to say, the more one learns about others, they learn about themselves; as such, Rutgers' variety will also provide more insight into my own life.

Let me know what you think - any feedback would be super appreciated. Thanks!

LorxX099 4 / 10  
Nov 23, 2009   #2
First off, I would start off with a different first sentence... try something that would better introduce the paragraph rather than outrightly pronouncing what you are hoping to prove.

Second, the last sentence of the second paragraph should be part of the next paragraph

The essay itself is very good but... I feel you should add more about what you learned in the different places. Really create a picture on how different Oklahoma and Jersey are. You kinda did with the Ireland phrase, but give the reader a picture of Oklahoma. Also, write more about India and how you were able to adapt to each place.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Nov 25, 2009   #3
Even within the nation, the difference between the two societies was as pronounced that between Ireland and Omaha. ----> very interesting!! It is great when you tell the reader something interesting like this.

...and we spent those weeks being juggled among primarily Hindi-speaking relatives.

Here, my inability to speak Hindi with fluency proved to be...


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