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Write an essay in which you tell us about someone who has made an impact on your life and explain how and why this person is important to you
There is always that certain someone who formulates a profound impact on an individual's life. This person shall strongly encourage one to make the right choice on the many difficult decisions one will confront during their lifetime.
In my life there have been not one, but many influential figures. One in particular that has constructed a massive effect on me is my oldest sibling Samantha Yvette Inocencio. We aren't alike in personalities, but we stick together like two peas in a pod. She has always sacrificed herself and put an immense effort into her education. My sister is of great assistance and advices me to try my best in everything I do. It is hard to describe her except for the fact that she is an extraordinary perfectionist. Samantha has always given me the impression that my dreams are closer than they appear to be. She has facilitated me from a young age on the many things I have struggled in. I still reminisce the time when I entered this art contest. I was supposed to make a painting based on the things I loved. I remember I had two days before my drawing was due and still it was difficult for me to come up with something to draw about. I rush to my sister's room searching and looking for clues to find out what I can draw and still nothing came to mind. Then I saw my sister and I asked her and all she would tell me "draw something that comes from your heart, you will figure it out I promise." Those words astonish me, but still I didn't get what she was trying to tell me. I thought and thought for hours until an idea pop out of my mind. Those words did help and somehow my sister knew I figure what to draw sooner or later. I brainstorm for a while and started to draw. Hours pass and I drew my sister and me together with the things we both love to do. That day I felt so happy because I knew the person that I felt most close to and admired was my sister. I entered my drawing and won first place. I couldn't believe it I won! My sister brought me flowers and told me "I told you Amy you can do it yourself; just set your mind to it." I hugged her and realize how lucky I am to have a great supporter in my life, whatever the situation is I know she will always be there to assist me.
Write an essay in which you tell us about someone who has made an impact on your life and explain how and why this person is important to you
There is always that certain someone who formulates a profound impact on an individual's life. This person shall strongly encourage one to make the right choice on the many difficult decisions one will confront during their lifetime.
In my life there have been not one, but many influential figures. One in particular that has constructed a massive effect on me is my oldest sibling Samantha Yvette Inocencio. We aren't alike in personalities, but we stick together like two peas in a pod. She has always sacrificed herself and put an immense effort into her education. My sister is of great assistance and advices me to try my best in everything I do. It is hard to describe her except for the fact that she is an extraordinary perfectionist. Samantha has always given me the impression that my dreams are closer than they appear to be. She has facilitated me from a young age on the many things I have struggled in. I still reminisce the time when I entered this art contest. I was supposed to make a painting based on the things I loved. I remember I had two days before my drawing was due and still it was difficult for me to come up with something to draw about. I rush to my sister's room searching and looking for clues to find out what I can draw and still nothing came to mind. Then I saw my sister and I asked her and all she would tell me "draw something that comes from your heart, you will figure it out I promise." Those words astonish me, but still I didn't get what she was trying to tell me. I thought and thought for hours until an idea pop out of my mind. Those words did help and somehow my sister knew I figure what to draw sooner or later. I brainstorm for a while and started to draw. Hours pass and I drew my sister and me together with the things we both love to do. That day I felt so happy because I knew the person that I felt most close to and admired was my sister. I entered my drawing and won first place. I couldn't believe it I won! My sister brought me flowers and told me "I told you Amy you can do it yourself; just set your mind to it." I hugged her and realize how lucky I am to have a great supporter in my life, whatever the situation is I know she will always be there to assist me.