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"the inspiring book called The Last Lecture" - Application Essay : DigiPen



Rocket boy 3 / 2  
Dec 19, 2010   #1
Reasons for applying: Discuss your reasons for applying to DigiPen and explain how these reasons relate to your future goals (personal, education, and professional)

Hi everyone Tx for reading my essay. I spent all day to write this dang thing. here it goes XD

I had not been a big fan of sports. They seemed silly and pointless. But all the "girly" things always charmed me so much. They had a song to sing and visible rules to follow. ( I meant that girl's game had more rules to follow. So it is more like a well organized maze that you must follow the specific rules like jumping every time a rope swings. For me football or soccer was somewhat a chaotic game that you do not understand what to do)

So I was always the one who brought all boys and forced them to break their stereotypes. The game, however, got bored as we played them again and again. So we had to invent more rules make it alive. At the end the simple game Hide And Sick became a rocket science. My passion for game grew more and more as it had filled the absent of of my parents; my parents were divorced, and I was sent to my Grany.

After reading the inspiring book called The Last Lecture, I was determined to study in abroad in order to give myself a chance to make my future dream come true, but I never forgot to play video game once a week. It was obvious that I love video game, but I was not allowed to believe it. My Mom was a teacher and my Dad majored in Philosophy and they both went to prestigious universities. The expectation was high. However, at the particular evening, the passion had evoked me, again.

Surprisingly the incident that had woken me (I dont understand why you do not understand because right after I mention the incident I did explain what it is. Can you be more specific what you do not understand?) happened when I was working in a voluntary center every Friday to help children.(I had combined these two sentences into one) It is an exhausting job but its mysterious charm is irresistible. I would be there and do all the wishes of the kids. I drew and made all the crowns and monsters. Sometimes they were not satisfied, but most of the time, it brought a smile on their faces. And the smile brought me back a smile on my face. I was happy when someone could enjoy what I made for them. I was satisfied when someone could appreciate my hard-work. I was filled with happiness when they played with my creations; crown, mask, monster, and sword. I finally could realize the mysterious charm why I could not resist not to be there. Why I devote myself on every Friday.

I love making a game. It does not need to be a fancy game. I just want to make something that everyone can enjoy. A game that can let you forget who, what, where, and why you are. And draws the little hope and the little smile on your face.

It seemed DigiPen could put me a pair of wings and free my dream. I love the fact the instant image of your website is all about video game related information. Interviews, gallery, art works, and showcase. Especially the fact that you guys proudly announce the awards earned. It brings me such a confident. But most of all, the fact that there are people like me, who are deeply motivated to make a game, makes your school the best school ever on earth to me. The love for your school swallowed me that it makes me to praise every detail of your school. Portal is one of my favorite games, too. I can go on and on. I can guarantee you that I will never be a mistake to choose.

Vbalandina 2 / 17  
Dec 19, 2010   #2
First of all what is your prompt?

I don't think that it is a good idea to highlight the 1st letters))

They had a song to sing and visible rules to follow.

What do you mean by this sentence?

Surprisingly the incident that had woken me happened when I was working with children. I work in a voluntary center every Friday to help children.

Try to make 1 sentence of this two. And also I didn't understand what incident did you mean?

And about the ending, do you really think that you will be admitted to the university just because you like their portal?
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Dec 29, 2010   #3
I have not been a big fan of sports.

The games , however, got bored boring as we played them again and again. So we had to invent more rules make it alive interesting. At the end the simple game Hide And Sick Seek became a rocket science.

I just want to make something that everyone can enjoy. ---nice!!

This is inspirational, and it makes the reader feel a sense of admiration for you because of your creativity and positive attitude.
cometcrater 1 / 2  
Dec 29, 2010   #4
There are a few grammatical errors, try reading it out loud to find all of them. Also, "mom" and "dad" are not capitalized if you use them after the word "my"

So just little stuff like that can improve, otherwise your essay flows and fits the prompt very well.

Goodluck!


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