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sa1na 9 / 72  
Oct 7, 2014   #1
Reflect on an idea or experience that has been important to your intellectual development. (100 to 250 words)
Working as a member of the Rescue Agent Simulation team, my favorite activity, opened the door of the JAVA's world to me. Admittedly, it was challenging, needing a lot of energy and effort since firstly, our team consisted of only my friend and I, whereas other teams had at least five members. Moreover, the competitions for this field are all in university level while we were only sixteen when we started the project. However, I enjoyed each and every single moment of all the efforts and endeavors.

Our job was to program all day long. The server the school provided us with was not adequate, but meanwhile we had to try to make do with it. There were lots of nights we did not get any sleep and even when we were not working on the project, in our unconsciousness we were still seeking for strategies and solutions. Finally, all this strenuous work resulted into something extraordinary; the fifth rank in IranOpen Competitions and Forth rank in the World RoboCup competitions showed us how we were able to succeed in the job in just half of the time it took others to do it.

Conclusively, in addition to developing my knowledge about JAVA programming language, this experience showed me how I could success through endeavor and extra effort, how by working as a team, success was not an unconceivable result, and how by enjoying a task, it would not look as much arduous as it naturally seems.

Write a note to your future roommate that reveals something about you or that will help your roommate -- and us -- know you better. (100 to 250 words)

My very dear roommate,
Firstly, I have an unquestionably marvelous news for you. You are going to be roommate with a girl who never gets angry or upset. You can live however you desire, and I can assure you I am going to respect your ideas and beliefs. However, if you are not the same, and if some of my attitudes are going to bother you, please just let me know; I would commit myself to do my best not to annoy you -though I do not think I would have a behavior that would cause you ANY trouble.

I love books, and I am either not at home -working or doing a project somewhere, or I am reading books. I hope you do not mind if I would not talk with you or anyone else as much. Nevertheless, I guarantee I would be there whenever you need someone to talk to.

Last word: remember that we are going to be intimate friends. No matter what a person you are going to be, you can count on me as a devoted and a faithful friend owing to the fact that not people's looks nor their background is important for me, but what matters is their attitudes and personality.

Mod comment:It will be better if you split it into two separate threads

AlinaSkripets 11 / 41  
Oct 8, 2014   #2
Roommate letter - It's a really nice letter but it seems like you are ready to put up with anything. You made a great accent on it although it's clear that there are some things that you would prefer not to witness/experience. Maybe you should concentrate more on your hobbies, interests, things you would like to do with her and so on.
OP sa1na 9 / 72  
Oct 8, 2014   #3
I revised it a bit as to make it more about myself and my personality.

My esteemed roommate,
Firstly, I have an unquestionably marvelous news for you. You are going to be roommate with a girl who never gets angry or upset. You can live however you desire, and I can assure you I am going to respect your ideas and beliefs. However, if you are not the same, and if some of my attitudes are going to bother you, please just let me know; I would commit myself to do my best not to annoy you.

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AlinaSkripets 11 / 41  
Oct 8, 2014   #4
I really like the corrections you've made. Good job! Still when you write about tasks, what tasks can your roommate give to you? Do you mean that your roommate can rely on you with whatever she needs? This is a very nice to mention if it is the case :)

One more thing, However, if you are not the same, and if some of my attitudes are going to bother you, please just let me know; I would commit myself to do my best not to annoy you. - this one sentence seems a little arrogant. Like "if you are not as good as I am it's ok...
OP sa1na 9 / 72  
Oct 8, 2014   #5
Alina, I exactly meant that, and I am happy you got my point.

My esteemed roommate,
Firstly, I have an unquestionably marvelous news for you. You are going to be roommate with a girl who never gets angry. You can live however you desire, and I can assure you I am going to respect your ideas and beliefs. However,if some of my attitudes are going to bother you, please just let me know; I would commit myself to do my best not to annoy you.

I love books, and I am either not at home -working on a project somewhere, or I am reading books. Nevertheless, I guarantee I would be there whenever you need someone to talk to.

Moreover, just in case not to freak you out, be aware that I am an extraordinarily multitask person; you would never see me occupied with only one thing in process, and the evidence is my laptop's desktop with each part engaged to one of my occupation. Thus, you can be satisfied all my tasks, either about our pretty little room or related to whatever common between us, will be done precisely as demanded and by time; at any rate, you can rely on me in whatever you need a hand.

Last word: remember that we are going to be intimate friends. No matter what a person you are going to be, you can count on me as a devoted and a faithful friend since not people's looks nor their background is important for me, but what matters is their personality.
AlinaSkripets 11 / 41  
Oct 13, 2014   #6
sa1na, it looks good to me :) I am not an expert but I hope I was able to help you a little. Good luck with your application!


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