Tell us about a person who has influenced you in a significant way.
As I entered the parking lot that would be held for the Muslim Student Association (MSA) Homeless Feeding, I had a smile on my face and my task of the day was to coordinate the homeless to the tables where they would receive their hot meal from MSA students. I gave myself a goal today, and it was to show leadership in front of the homeless and MSA students. I tried to achieve this by offering aid to anyone who needs it since the purpose of a leader is to serve those he/she is leading.
Through this event, I noticed something peculiar. Many MSA students were timid to the homeless and the only reply they ever gave was "Happy Holidays!", yet they were comfortable talking amongst themselves. Even the MSA presidents of their local schools exhibited the same behavior. Even I failed to develop interaction with the homeless as I offered aid by answering simple questions followed by an awkward moment of silence. But one man came out and shattered the quiet atmosphere. He was the coordinator of humanitarian aid and when he spoke out loud, he didn't need a microphone to capture people's attentions. He effectively showed himself as a leader as he connected with the homeless and received their full cooperation. He did all this with few simple words that he spoke. He didn't employ any rhetorical device nor did he have charismatic appeal.[..]
Tell me what you think about the essay. Is there anything I need to cut out? Anything I did wrong?
As I entered the parking lot that would be held for the Muslim Student Association (MSA) Homeless Feeding, I had a smile on my face and my task of the day was to coordinate the homeless to the tables where they would receive their hot meal from MSA students. I gave myself a goal today, and it was to show leadership in front of the homeless and MSA students. I tried to achieve this by offering aid to anyone who needs it since the purpose of a leader is to serve those he/she is leading.
Through this event, I noticed something peculiar. Many MSA students were timid to the homeless and the only reply they ever gave was "Happy Holidays!", yet they were comfortable talking amongst themselves. Even the MSA presidents of their local schools exhibited the same behavior. Even I failed to develop interaction with the homeless as I offered aid by answering simple questions followed by an awkward moment of silence. But one man came out and shattered the quiet atmosphere. He was the coordinator of humanitarian aid and when he spoke out loud, he didn't need a microphone to capture people's attentions. He effectively showed himself as a leader as he connected with the homeless and received their full cooperation. He did all this with few simple words that he spoke. He didn't employ any rhetorical device nor did he have charismatic appeal.[..]
Tell me what you think about the essay. Is there anything I need to cut out? Anything I did wrong?