Hello, can someone please help me edit this for any mechanical and/or wrong word usage. I am applying for this summer research program at Duke and wanted to know whether the reasons that I present for wanting to participate sound valid. Also, how can some of my ideas be presented better to help my response be better communicated. If not, please tell me if I can leave it as is. Your help would be greatly appreciated.
Why are you interested in participating in the Duke SROP? (400 words or less)
Duke University is an institution renowned for its high caliber research. Having said this, Duke offers students, regardless of their financial barriers, the chance to become a part of the academic family. Being given the opportunity to conduct real life and independent scientific research is something that I would love to take part in. The reason for this is because the independence within the laboratories is what allows students to experience graduate school life at its best and most genuine way. Participating in the Summer Research Opportunity Program will allow me to think deeper about issues that continue to prevail in medicine and science while simultaneously seeking for solutions to these problems. The SROP program offers students the ability to work closely with faculty while bringing to fruition a lasting mentoring relationship that promises to keep students interested in pursuing graduate degrees, such as PhD and MD. Likewise, Duke University offers students the freedom to enjoy asking questions that may not have answers to. This is what helps stimulate the sense of independence that allows the student to feel comfortable and unafraid to venture into the unknown. It is this world that I would like to be a part of; a world that fosters and values individuality while contributing to that individual's intellectual maturity.
As a minority and first generation student who has strong interest in pursuing a doctorate degree, I could not think of a better program to join than SROP. The Neuroscience department at Duke University provides students the chance to gain a diverse perspective on whatever study they choose within this specialty. Because of this, I would like to conduct research related to Neuroscience. Being exposed to research in the Neuroscience department will allow me to gain access to opportunities that my school does not have. Furthermore, this program offers students the opportunity to become better informed of the path towards a graduate school degree. By exposing individuals to GRE preparation techniques and other weekly group led research activities, SROP promises the success of minority and underrepresented students to in graduate school. With the slow but steady increase in the number of minority students that have gone on to pursue doctorate degrees, I hope to contribute by committing to pursue my dreams of obtaining my doctorates degree.
Why are you interested in participating in the Duke SROP? (400 words or less)
SROP - best program to join
Duke University is an institution renowned for its high caliber research. Having said this, Duke offers students, regardless of their financial barriers, the chance to become a part of the academic family. Being given the opportunity to conduct real life and independent scientific research is something that I would love to take part in. The reason for this is because the independence within the laboratories is what allows students to experience graduate school life at its best and most genuine way. Participating in the Summer Research Opportunity Program will allow me to think deeper about issues that continue to prevail in medicine and science while simultaneously seeking for solutions to these problems. The SROP program offers students the ability to work closely with faculty while bringing to fruition a lasting mentoring relationship that promises to keep students interested in pursuing graduate degrees, such as PhD and MD. Likewise, Duke University offers students the freedom to enjoy asking questions that may not have answers to. This is what helps stimulate the sense of independence that allows the student to feel comfortable and unafraid to venture into the unknown. It is this world that I would like to be a part of; a world that fosters and values individuality while contributing to that individual's intellectual maturity.
As a minority and first generation student who has strong interest in pursuing a doctorate degree, I could not think of a better program to join than SROP. The Neuroscience department at Duke University provides students the chance to gain a diverse perspective on whatever study they choose within this specialty. Because of this, I would like to conduct research related to Neuroscience. Being exposed to research in the Neuroscience department will allow me to gain access to opportunities that my school does not have. Furthermore, this program offers students the opportunity to become better informed of the path towards a graduate school degree. By exposing individuals to GRE preparation techniques and other weekly group led research activities, SROP promises the success of minority and underrepresented students to in graduate school. With the slow but steady increase in the number of minority students that have gone on to pursue doctorate degrees, I hope to contribute by committing to pursue my dreams of obtaining my doctorates degree.