It has been a long time when I left my home country Korea to get better or education that I could satisfy. Since it's been several years, I asked myself what is different in getting education between Korean and foreign countries. First of all, I was really wanted to speak English so bad, but my home country's educational system could not effort me to speak English. It's disappointing me that I have to say so but in fact, even English teachers in Korea could not speak English. There might be various reasons to be like that. But I will not comment it any more in this essay. However it was main reason that I had to gave up getting an education in Korea.
First country that I had education was a Philippine. The main reason I had choose "Philippine" was Philippine's main language was English. It was really wonderful time and good experience to be enrolled in school where uses English. And I had a challenged in English from a Philippine student. After spend a year in Philippine I could have an opportunity that I enroll in Fairview International School in Malaysia. The reason that I transferred to that school was they got better English system which native English speaker teach as an English teacher. After I had finished language course from a foreign counties, I had to face a first difficulty of my life. I had not got a high school diploma when my age got old enough to go to college. Well I am the one who think education is an most important sources during my lives. And I did not just have a one paper "high school diploma. I had cried and cried again and again. But like there is always hope, I just heard about GED test which gives high school diploma. Since I had heard about GED, I had studied and studied day and night. And I just passed GED test and just got a diploma. "Thanks God" I repeated. From an experience of failure, I decided to study at USA where main language is English and gives a diploma. I just got letter of acceptance from "College of Lake County"; community college. And I packed up to leave another adventure of life.
My major is an undecided right now at College of Lake County. During attending that college, I always had a conflict in my mind that cares about which major I should study. Last year I had found what I want to study. It is "the Art" Last year I had wall painting assignment from a church and had found myself that I have an talents on art. And honestly my favorite class was an art class; I never got boring and disappointed whenever I had art assignment. For me, art is energy of life and goals of my life. I am not one who professional at art but to be a professional, I decided to apply "California College of art"
I just began my portfolio.
The world is not place where men or women live alone. It must be together and I think we have to help each other therefore during my high school years I participated volunteers for community service whenever I had time. And when I lived in Philippine I helped church for teaching bible and giving the necessities of life to poor people. And when I was in Malaysia I used to go to orphanage and I played with orphan people. And Since I came to America I was kindergarten bible teacher at Korean church. I always dreamed that I become a person who has to be necessary for community rather than just rich or luxury person.
My goals after I graduate college are that I could design the fancy accessories. I am the one who crazy at little materials like fancy accessories. Whenever I saw that kind of little fancy things I could not stop myself to buy it. And I used to imagine that it might be better if one that I bought was this or that color. And that was why I wanted to design fancy accessories.
Good job. You give a good explanation of why you want to get into the program, and of telling your history of how you got to where you are. Some changes are needed, and a little clarification in a few places, but overall you've got a good essay. Keep up your hard work.
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English Grad Studies, "Born in USSR" - proofreading my SoP
Hello everybody!
I am an international student applying to Graduate program in English.. I feel a bit worried about my statement of purpose, whether I missed some important points or made stylistic/grammar mistakes..
Can I please post my essay here in order to be reviewed?
Thank you and happy holidays!
Hi Sophia! Yes you can, and you can also look through the many other personal statements here at EssayForum to get ideas. Also, please help a few other people by giving your ideas about their essays; your experience as an international student makes you especially prepared to help some of our other multinational and bilingual essay writers.
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