Italian Studies - Why Brown short answer! (1000 char)

Hey guys please feel free to tear this apart! I know it is very dull, but it is all true, and is JUST under the 1000 character limit.

"Please tell us more about your interest in Brown: Why does Brown appeal to you as a college option? Who or what has influenced your decision to apply?" (1000 characters)

Brown University is the one place that sparks my interests, ignites my aspirations, and fuels my determination. The collaboration between the faculty and students, the accessible research facilities, and the interdisciplinary nature of the curriculum are all important to me. Because of my avid interest in Italian history, language and culture, I am drawn to Brown's concentration in Italian Studies and am impressed by the Brown Program in Bologna. Having travelled to Italy twice, I am eager to enroll in courses with Italian students in the University of Bologna. Also, as the rest of my application shows, I have a lot of experience organizing events for my school, church and community. With passionate students and a notably active Swearer Center, Brown will best enable me to extend my philanthropic commitment. Brown is the ideal place to explore my love of both Italy and entrepreneurial spirit, cross disciplinary paths and ultimately chart the broadest possible intellectual journey.

Hello,
Grammatically this is well written. Maybe to make it a little less dull, elaborate on your love of Italy, tell us of your two trips (by the way I'm very jealous,TWO trips?, I'm hoping for one in my lifetime.)

You might want to shake up the last two sentences instead of having Brown will..Brown is..That can get repetitive really easily.

Thank you for your feedback. My main common app essay is about Italy and talks about my two trips and how I was able to do pull that off (I had paid for one myself), and the other Brown short answer about the applicants academic interest also elaborates on it, so I thought it would be redundant to elaborate on it again here. Also, the 1000 character limit is a killer. =/

Yes that is a good idea to change those last two sentences, the structures are very similar. I will revamp them, thank you!!

Also, do you think that my reasons are "powerful" enough (for lack of a better word)? I wish I had the room to write more in the answer, elaborate and add other reasons, but I do not.

Does it give the message, to the admission officer's satisfaction, that I am REALLY interested in Brown University?

Yes, I think you do.
You show that you have a good grasp of what Brown is, and you outline the certain aspects of it that attract you.